Re: GAS 2010 Sponsorship package proposal

[Brian Cameron <brian cameron oracle com>]

Pockey:

> Thanks again for helping out to proof read. I have modified all the
> comments.
>
> Besides, for "About GNOME.Asia Summit", I added the following sentences
> as well. Please kindly help to proof read as well.
>
> The summit has been recognized as the top 3 Open Source conference in

I think you mean to say "as one of the top"

> China in 2008 by the Chinese government and the biggest Open Source
> conference in Vietnam in 2009 by the Vietnamese government. Please refer
> to gnome.asia/ for more details.

Some other comments:

> Targetting GNOME and Open Source users, marketers and developers;
> this is a unique opportunity for stakeholders to reach out to the
> broadest possible Asian and Taiwanese audiance.

You misspell "Targeting" and "audience".

> As an immediate outcome you will have preferential access to speaking
> opportunities, to a conference database of highly qualified
> volunteers and developers and the possibility to add panel
> discussions on specific topics (recruting, technology, OSS business,
> etc.) or anything that you would feel is valuable for both the
> audience and your business.

You misspell "recruiting"

> Visible presence in the banner at the main venue stage;

I would say "on the banner"

> The opportunity to have one (1) cornerstone stand or booth of the
> size of 6x9m

I would say "of the size 6x9m".  Note the other packages have similar
wording which should be corrected.

Under "Custom Sponsorship":

> Free gifts (e.g. USB sticks, bags, notebooks, etc. that can be used
> as freebies or lucky draw gifts to guests and participatnts.)

You misspell "participants".

> And definitely, once the draft is finalized, we can send it to the
> mobile list , thanks!

Great!

Brian