Re: COSCUP / GNOME.Asia Press Release (English Version)-- Need your help to review

[Brian Cameron <brian cameron oracle com>]

Emily:

Looks good, some minor comments:

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> COSCUP / GNOME.Asia 2010 attracted more than 1000 developers, students,
> business professionals, media and government participants and more than
> 22 well-known international and domestic companies as sponsors.

I would say "media, government participants, and more than 22
well-known".  This avoids using the word "and" twice.

> This year, the COSCUP worked with the GNOME Foundation to co-organize
> the GNOME.Asia Summit together with the COSCUP annual conference.  The
> join COSCUP / GNOME.Asia 2010 conference was hosted from  Aug 14 - 15,

I think you mean "joint" not "join".

> 2010 in Academia Sinica, Taipei, Taiwan. COSCUP is a local conference
> organized by the a local community that has been growing every year.

I would say "organized by a local community".

> This year, along with GNOME.Asia, it attracted more than 1000
> participants.All tickets sold out just an hour and a half after the

I'd add a space before "All" at the beginning of the sentence.

> online registration opened up! In addition to the 1000 participants who
> were present at the conference, there are also more than 700 people
> participating through the online video and text broadcast.
>
> The main theme for COSCUP/GNOME.Asia 2010 were HTML 5, Open Web, Mobile,
> GNOME free desktop technology, and FLOSS licensing . More than 80 talks

I would remove the space before the period at the end of the sentence.

> delivered by 60+ international and domestic speakers; they delivered
> speeches, joined panel discussions, brainstormed, and exchanged new
> ideas at this conference.
>
> Well-known international and domestic IT companies are also actively

I would say "were also" instead of "are also".

> involved in this conference. The highly skilled audience also provided
> them with the opportunity to recruit new employees. They were recruiting
> for more than 50 kinds of jobs and 1000 job openings. Nokia promoted and
> sold their N900 cellphone and invited speakers to share their latest
> knowledge and experience about Meego and Symbian 3.
>
> As a result of the conference, the local Taiwanese community and
> surrounding Asian countries are now more actively involved with the
> international community, building a better relationship with

I would say "community, and building a better"

> international organizations . For example, the local community
> registered the Chinese HTML Interest Group with the World Wide Web
> Consortium (W3C) ; they are working with the GNOME Foundation to build a
> Taiwan GNOME Users Group; and they are planning to found a Taiwan Cloud
> Computing Users Group with international and domestic engineers.
>
>
> The presentations and videos are available on the official website.
> Please visit COSCUP and GNOME.Asia official website: http://coscup.org/
> and http://gnome.asia <http://gnome.asia/>.

Brian