Re: Copy for Linux 92
- From: Máirín Duffy <duffy redhat com>
- To: Brian Cameron <brian cameron oracle com>
- Cc: marketing-list gnome org
- Subject: Re: Copy for Linux 92
- Date: Thu, 02 Sep 2010 14:31:49 -0400
On Thu, 2010-09-02 at 12:15 -0500, Brian Cameron wrote:
> Máirín:
>
> > Here is the print-ready PDF:
> >
> > http://duffy.fedorapeople.org/temp/gnome/gnomead_final.pdf
>
> This is a cute ad and I do like it.
>
> A few minor criticisms, though.
>
> It seems a bit ambiguous to me. I would probably think that this was
> an ad for a social networking service for meeting friends who speak
> different languages if I did not already know that GNOME is a desktop.
> I suppose, though, that most people who read a Linux magazine would
> already mostly know what GNOME is, though.
>
> Also, it seems a shame not to highlight that GNOME 3 is soon being
> released in an ad that we place right now. Perhaps changing "Meet
> GNOME" to "Meet GNOME 3" or adding some "Coming soon...GNOME 3" text
> might help and not be too much work.
http://duffy.fedorapeople.org/temp/gnome/gnomead_final2.pdf
There's an s/build/built correction too.
Good to go?
~m
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