Re: review request: GNOME marketing flyer for new users in less economically developed countries.

[Ben Konrath <ben bagu org>]

Hi,

Sorry, I gave you some incorrect links to the new files. Here are the
correct ones:

PDFs:

http://bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-brochure-v5.pdf
http://bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-brochure-with-fold-marks-v5.pdf

Inkscape 0.48 SVGs:

http://bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-brochure-with-fold-marks-p1.svg
http://bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-brochure-with-fold-marks-p2.svg

Cheers, Ben

On Fri, Nov 19, 2010 at 6:38 PM, Ben Konrath <ben bagu org> wrote:
> Hi,
>
> On Tue, Nov 16, 2010 at 12:41 PM, Frederic Muller <fredm gnome org> wrote:
>> Sorry for the late feedback. I do have a few comments:
>>
>> 1. The green background is quite blurry  giving a potential sub-par
>> impression on the display quality of the GNOME desktop. Maybe a plain color
>> or gradient background would fix this.
>
> I agree. I've replaced the screenshot in the new version.
>
>> 2. Remaining typo in mobile phones section, 2nd sentence: "you get get
>> the..."
>
> Thanks, it's fixed.
>
>> 3. Accessibility: I would try to rephrase the paragraph without the word
>> 'disabilities' and emphasizing on 'unconditional access' or 'access for
>> everyone'. I am not a native speaker, but if needed, can give it a try.
>
> I agree. I've re-worded it to this:
>
> The GNOME desktop includes applications that allow everybody to use a
> computer regardless of physical or mental
> ability. From a screen reader for people with visual impairment to
> specialized applications for people who can't use regular mice and
> keyboards.
>
>> 4. No Serial Numbers: having lived in the developing world for the past 15
>> years, serial numbers are never an issue: they actually come on the CD with
>> the pirated copy of whatever proprietary software you decide to use. Maybe
>> replacing that section with all the productivity, graphic/artistic,
>> fun/games, and web applications available for GNOME might make the space
>> usage more compelling. Then again it might depend on the audience but from
>> my experience I've never met any developing world government who was
>> concerned about internal piracy (ymmv).
>
> Yeah, I have seen serial numbers on the CDs when doing ICT support
> work rural Uganda. But they don't always work and when that happens it
> a pain to track a new one down. I'm also trying to say some about the
> annoying  'please validate your OS' messages that keep popping up if
> you don't have a legitimate version of windows.
>
> As a side note, perhaps you'd be interested in joining us on the GNOME
> developing world list:
>
> http://mail.gnome.org/mailman/listinfo/developing-world-list
>
> I'm sure you would have comments to add to our discussions.
>
>> 5. Joining GNOME: I would probably add something more dynamic like
>> mentioning that it's fun, you make lots of friends and
>
> Yeah, I agree fun and friends are good things. I tweaked the wording a
> bit in this section.
>
>> you get to learn of a lot of (new) stuff which could get you a job.
>
> I made this brochure for some outreach marketing activities in
> sub-Saharan Africa. I don't think it's realistic to say that learning
> how to use or program GNOME might lead to employment. At least not in
> this region and not at this time.
>
>> 6. joining GNOME user groups: unfortunately there are a lot more LUGs than
>> GNOME user group and only recommending to visit GUG limits the possibilities
>> for our target audience. I'd mention any Free Software group such a *nix UG,
>> Free Software groups and others (including GUGs) as they will encounter the
>> GNOME experience in any of those.
>
> This is good suggestion but right now I want this brochure to be about GNOME.
>
>> 7. You might mention somewhere in the bottom "made with GNOME"?
>
> I made the brochure with Inkscape but I don't think it's part of
> GNOME. The first page says that I'm using GNOME icons and graphics
> from openclipart.org.
>
>> 8. It'd be nice to have a native speaker reduce word repetitions and help
>> produce a better phrased document.
>>
>> (9.) As a side note I don't think Linux is the best platform for multimedia
>> playback or encoding (not something I'd put forward anyway) but I suppose we
>> can allow ourselves to embellish the reality...
>
> I don't agree with this point. Every platform has pluses and minuses
> but I think GNOME has pretty good multimedia support.
>
> Ok, now for the updated files:
>
> PDFs:
>
> http://www.bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-brochure-with-fold-marks-v5.pdf
> http://www.bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-brochure-v5.pdf
>
> Inkscape 0.48 SVGs:
>
> http://www.bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-flyer-p1-with-fold-marks.svg
> http://www.bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-flyer-p2-with-fold-marks.svg
>
> Thanks for your extensive review.
>
> Cheers, Ben
>