Re: review request: GNOME marketing flyer for new users in less economically developed countries.

[Frederic Muller <fredm gnome org>]

On 11/16/2010 06:15 PM, Ben Konrath wrote:
> Hi Andreas,
>
> On Mon, Nov 1, 2010 at 4:44 AM, Andreas Nilsson<nisses mail home se>  wrote:
> > That looks really great, excellent work!
> > I would advice to export the icons as bitmaps and then add them to the
> > document as such, that way you can be sure that they render correctly. Make
> > sure to embed them rather than link them though. Another way is to try and
> > use simpler icons.
>
> I found out that the rendering problems come from a bug in evince /
> poppler. The files render properly in acroread so I've decided to keep
> them as SVG. I would like the highest quality I can get for printing.
> The updated files are linked on the gnome marketing wiki but I'll list
> them here too.
>
> PDFs:
>
> http://www.bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-brochure-with-fold-marks-v4.pdf
> http://www.bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-brochure-v4.pdf
>
> Inkscape SVGs:
>
> http://www.bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-flyer-p1-with-fold-marks.svg
> http://www.bagu.org/gnome/gnome-dev-world-flyer-p2-with-fold-marks.svg
>
> The PDF with fold marks should be used if you're folding the brochure
> by hand. The PDF without the fold marks should be used if you're using
> a printer or folding machine to automatically fold the brochure. The
> SVG files have the fold marks included but the marks should be removed
> when generating PDFs for use with automatic folding machines.
>
> Cheers, Ben

Hi!

Sorry for the late feedback. I do have a few comments:

1. The green background is quite blurry  giving a potential sub-par 
impression on the display quality of the GNOME desktop. Maybe a plain 
color or gradient background would fix this.

2. Remaining typo in mobile phones section, 2nd sentence: "you get get 
the..."

3. Accessibility: I would try to rephrase the paragraph without the word 
'disabilities' and emphasizing on 'unconditional access' or 'access for 
everyone'. I am not a native speaker, but if needed, can give it a try.

4. No Serial Numbers: having lived in the developing world for the past 
15 years, serial numbers are never an issue: they actually come on the 
CD with the pirated copy of whatever proprietary software you decide to 
use. Maybe replacing that section with all the productivity, 
graphic/artistic, fun/games, and web applications available for GNOME 
might make the space usage more compelling. Then again it might depend 
on the audience but from my experience I've never met any developing 
world government who was concerned about internal piracy (ymmv).

5. Joining GNOME: I would probably add something more dynamic like 
mentioning that it's fun, you make lots of friends and you get to learn 
of a lot of (new) stuff which could get you a job. Again not being a 
native speaker doesn't make me the ideal candidate to rewrite this 
section but let me know if you can't find anyone else.

6. joining GNOME user groups: unfortunately there are a lot more LUGs 
than GNOME user group and only recommending to visit GUG limits the 
possibilities for our target audience. I'd mention any Free Software 
group such a *nix UG, Free Software groups and others (including GUGs) 
as they will encounter the GNOME experience in any of those.

7. You might mention somewhere in the bottom "made with GNOME"?

8. It'd be nice to have a native speaker reduce word repetitions and 
help produce a better phrased document.

(9.) As a side note I don't think Linux is the best platform for 
multimedia playback or encoding (not something I'd put forward anyway) 
but I suppose we can allow ourselves to embellish the reality...

Of course you might not agree with everything I wrote... ;-)

Let me know if I can do anything to help.

Fred