Re: Updated "Why choose GNOME" leaflet



Jeff Waugh wrote:
<quote who="Thomas Wood">

We're now looking for comments on the text to make it more fun and
interesting. It's probably worth noting the prospective audience will
probably be IT managers and small developers.

Suggestions:

 * "Why Choose GNOME?" -> "Put your foot down: Demand GNOME." (semi-joking;
   this heading would be better off as a statement rather than a question).

 * Use the new foot device and logotype. The spacing of the logo and first
   two paragraphs looks awkward. Too much on the left and top, too little on
   the right and bottom.
Máiríns new stuff in the gnome wiki, right?
 * "desktop for end-users, users" -> "desktop for users"/
Or perhaps "for people that needs to get stuff done" :)
 * Change "IBM, HP and Sun" to focus on the major distributors, who we can
   clearly associate with GNOME: Red Hat, Novell, Sun, Canonical.

 * "Gtk+" -> "GTK+"
The text mentions that it runs on Unix, Linux and even Windows. Does it run on OSX these days?
 * "choose from a dozen" -> "choose from many"

 * "and of course plain old C and C++" -> "C and C++". Don't sap the
   strength of a message with a joke like this. :-)


Good stuff! Have you considered different formats, such as single or triple
fold A4?
I'm thinking of putting some page on gnome.org (with roughly the same text, maybe a link or two) and link it with a banner so that when the dude who was at LinuxWorld gets home he can just send the url to his boss about it, as he only took one leaflet at LinuxWorld. Didn't considerate other designs much, as we mostly wanted to spice up the current one a bit. I guess we need to produce some better stuff later on, with really good copywriting and kickass design, more than just Get the Techy Facts about this Desktop of Ours. ;)
- Andreas





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