Re: [3.18 Release Video] Manuscript draft 01 ready for review
- From: Bastian <hougaard junior gmail com>
- To: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
- Cc: marketing-list <engagement-list gnome org>
- Subject: Re: [3.18 Release Video] Manuscript draft 01 ready for review
- Date: Tue, 25 Aug 2015 11:42:25 +0200
Hi Allan,
Thanks for the feedback!
On Mon, Aug 24, 2015 at 5:07 , Allan Day <allanpday gmail com> wrote:
* "GNOME can now adjust the brightness of your screen automatically
if your computer supports it" - would benefit from more specificity:
"If your computer has a light sensor, GNOME can now use it to
automatically adjust the brightness of your screen."
I wasn't sure if I could assume users would be familiar with the existence of these sensors in their laptop. I've put in your suggestion for now.
* "Software now has support for updating firmware, to help you keep
your devices up to date." - "help" makes it sound like this is a small
convenience thing. The new feature is a bit more than that. Perhaps
something like "In the past it has been difficult to keep device
firmware up to date. With the new version of GNOME Software, this is a
thing of the past: installing firmware updates will be as easy as
pressing a button." ?
Sounds a bit like the plan is to feature this as one of the major milestones of the 3.18 release?
In that case I'll gladly give it about as much screen time as Files will get.
* "Nibbles sports new revamped graphics for a better gaming
experience." - that's not going to land until next cycle.
Removed
* "GNOME Documents has an improved way of organizing your documents."
- a bit generic, and makes it sounds like there is new functionality.
That's not the case - we've just made the UI nicer. :)
Corrected to: "GNOME Documents comes with a revamped user interface for organizing your documents."
* "GNOME's development tools has also improved vastly." - you have
some grammer issues there. It should be: "GNOME's development tools
have vastly improved." Also, I'd be a little wary of overselling
there!
Noted, will remove some adjectives. (:
* "Two new widgets has also arrived in GTK+ for viewing images and
videos." The video widget (gstgtk) is actually part of GStreamer, not
GTK+. The image widget (GtkImageView) won't be landing until next
cycle.
Removed
* "Finally, Boxes has improved its interface with a new list view for
heavy users of virtual machines." - "heavy" could be misinterpreted
here! "users with lots of virtual machines"?!
Corrected.
-Bastian
[
Date Prev][
Date Next] [
Thread Prev][
Thread Next]
[
Thread Index]
[
Date Index]
[
Author Index]