[release-notes/gnome-3-18] refine a little

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit d3773b6fab39fa0df672154dd710ba5253eec266
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Tue Sep 15 19:20:03 2015 +0100

    refine a little

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diff --git a/help/C/index.page b/help/C/index.page
index 0a4dc55..ffe306b 100644
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@@ -26,28 +26,28 @@
 
   <title>Introducing GNOME &gnomeversion;: Gothenburg</title>
 
-  <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; is the latest version of GNOME 3, and is the result of 6 months’ hard work by the 
GNOME community. It contains major new features, as well as numerous smaller improvements and bug fixes. The 
release incorporates &gitcommits; changes, made by approximately &gitauthors; contributors.</p>
+  <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; is the latest version of GNOME 3, and is the result of 6 months’ hard work by the 
GNOME community. It contains major new features, as well as many smaller improvements and bug fixes. In 
total, the release incorporates &gitcommits; changes, made by approximately &gitauthors; contributors.</p>
 
-<p>&gnomeversion; has been named “Gothenburg” in recognition of the team who made <link 
href="https://2015.guadec.org/";>this year’s GUADEC conference</link> possible. GUADEC is GNOME’s main annual 
conference, and is only possible due to the hard work of local volunteers: we thank you!</p>
+<p>&gnomeversion; has been named “Gothenburg” in recognition of this year's GUADEC organising team. <link 
href="https://www.guadec.org/";>GUADEC</link> is GNOME’s main annual conference, and is only possible due to 
the hard work of local volunteers. In 2015, it was held in Gothenburg, Sweden.</p>
 
   <section id="google-drive">
     <title>Google Drive Integration</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>With GNOME &gnomeversion;, it is now possible to access Google Drive directly from the Files 
application, as well as from file chooser dialogs. To use the feature, simply add your Google account through 
the Online Accounts settings, and Google Drive will automatically appear in the files places sidebar.</p>
-    <p>Once set up, Google Drive behaves very similarly to the rest of your files: Google Drive folders can 
be created just like regular folders; where possible, files are opened using your normal applications 
(otherwise, they are opened in the browser). It is also really easy to upload files to Google Drive — all you 
have to do is move or copy them across.</p>
+    <p>Once set up, Google Drive behaves very similarly to the rest of your files and folders: files can be 
opened using your normal applications, and folders can be created just like regular folders. It is also 
really easy to upload files to Google Drive — all you have to do is move or copy them across.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="better-files">
     <title>Files Improvements</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/files.png"/>
-    <p>The files places sidebar, which is shown in Files and open and save dialogs, has been reworked for 
&gnomeversion;. A new location, called <gui>Other Locations</gui>, has been added, which provides a useful 
overview of local and network locations. Many of these locations are no longer automatically shown in the 
places sidebar, which helps to avoid clutter.</p>
-    <p>Long-running operations (such as copying or moving large numbers of files) have also been improved: a 
temporary indicator now provides progress information in the header bar, which shows more detailed 
information when pressed. This allows you to easily see progress on ongoing operations from any Files window, 
and avoids progress windows getting in the way.</p>
+    <p>The files places sidebar, which is shown in Files and in open and save dialogs, has been reworked for 
&gnomeversion;. A new location, called <gui>Other Locations</gui>, has been added, which provides a useful 
overview of local and network locations. Many of these locations are no longer automatically shown in the 
places sidebar, which helps to avoid clutter.</p>
+    <p>Long-running operations (such as copying or moving large numbers of files) have also been improved: a 
button shows progress information in the header bar, which shows more detailed information when pressed. This 
allows you to easily see progress at a glance, and avoids progress windows getting in the way.</p>
 
     <p>There have also been a huge number of smaller improvements to the files experience during the 
&gnomeversion; cycle. Here are some of them:</p>
     <list>
-      <item><p>Improved folder creation as well as improved file and folder renaming. These operations now 
use dialogs and popovers to provide feedback and a clearer workflow. (This change was introduced following 
user testing results.)</p></item>
-      <item><p>A new search feature has been added to files dialogs, which is automatically activated by 
typing, and is consistent with other GNOME applications.</p></item>
-      <item><p>Context menus can now be accessed using a touch screen.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Folder creation has been improved, as has file and folder renaming. These operations now use 
dialogs and popovers to provide feedback and a clearer workflow. (This change was introduced following user 
testing results.)</p></item>
+      <item><p>A new search feature has been added to open and save dialogs. This is automatically activated 
by typing, and is consistent with other GNOME applications.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Context menus can now be accessed using a touch screen - to activate, just press and 
hold.</p></item>
       <item><p>When dragging a file or folder, the places sidebar now shows a prominent drop target, in 
order to make it obvious how to create bookmarks through drag and drop. (This change is another response to 
user testing results.)</p></item>
       <item><p>Placeholders are now displayed when folders are empty, or when no search results are 
found.</p></item>
       <item><p>Recursive search is now automatically disabled when searching remote locations, in order to 
prevent performance problems.</p></item>
@@ -58,8 +58,8 @@
   <section id="firmware-updates">
     <title>Firmware Updates</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/firmware-updates.png"/>
-    <p>In the past, it has been difficult to update device software (such as your computer’s BIOS) under 
GNOME. Now this has changed, thanks to a new initiative called the <link 
href="https://beta-lvfs.rhcloud.com/";>Linux Vendor Firmware Service</link>. This aims to make it possible for 
hardware manufacturers to distribute firmware updates for GNU/Linux, and GNOME &gnomeversion; has full 
support.</p>
-    <p>Using the Linux Vendor Firmware Service is easy with GNOME &gnomeversion;: if an update is provided 
for your device’s hardware, Software will automatically make it available to install the same way as other 
software updates.</p>
+    <p>In the past, it has been difficult to update device software (such as your computer’s BIOS) under 
GNOME. Now this has changed, thanks to a new initiative called the <link 
href="https://beta-lvfs.rhcloud.com/";>Linux Vendor Firmware Service</link>. This aims to make it possible for 
hardware manufacturers to distribute firmware updates for GNU/Linux.</p>
+    <p>The Linux Vendor Firmware Service is fully integrated with GNOME &gnomeversion;, and works 
automatically. If an update is becomes available for your device’s hardware, Software will automatically make 
it available to install the same way as other software updates.</p>
     <p>This feature can also be used to update the device software on removable devices, such as monitors, 
USB hubs and color colorimeters.</p>
   </section>
 
@@ -85,7 +85,7 @@
 
   <section id="more">
     <title>And that’s not all</title>
-    <p>There’s much more to GNOME &gnomeversion;. Read on to find out…</p>
+    <p>There’s much more to GNOME &gnomeversion;. Read on to learn more…</p>
     <links type="topic" groups="first second third"/>
   </section>