Re: Annual report - ready to print (almost)



Thanks, fixed.

On 07/20/2012 06:04 AM, Emily Gonyer wrote:
Hey all, just a few things:

Page 5 in  ..."binary that not only to benefits application
developers" remove the 'to' after "..source code and binary

Page 7,
-third paragraph ".. While the philosophy to keep things simply
remains," change "simply" to "simple"
-fifth paragraph ..."to be official part of GNOME": add 'an' before
'official part of GNOME', also drop the -on- in ..."next release and
-on- specific modules.

Page 10,
-Boston Summit, 2nd paragraph: .."Gtk+?/WebKit, Clutter 2.0, and
Gestures among others." - I'm sure I meant to determine which vs of
Gtk+ was worked, on, I'd assume 3 at this point, though I'm not 100%
on that. (2010)
- , add a comma after Evolution ..."Evolution Gstreamer, packaging
GNOME in Debian and many others."

Page 12,
- change 'server' to 'served': "The conference server as warm up for
the hackfest" and add "a" after "served as" so its "served as a warm
up",
- remo 'to' :  "GNOME documentation team to engage with other
fellows." ..'team engage with other fellows'

Under 'Accessibility hackfest agenda'
- add "The" and change 'Plans' to plan before the first line: "The
Plans for GNOME 3.."

Page 15
- need a space between 2011 and the: "In 2011the GNOME's outreach"
- change "runs" to "ran": "runs through March 15, 2012"

- remove ? before 'LinkedIn': "manager on ?LinkedIn"

Page 18: can we move the link
(http://openhatch.org/wiki/Open_Source_Workshop) down to the bottom?
Or put a [1] in and then the link either after the question is fully
answered or at the end of the interview (moving any/all others as
well).

Page 20: link: "mentoring howto:
http://people.gnome.org/~federico/docs/summer­of­code­mentoring­howto/";

Page 21: 2 links : .."available at http://youtu.be/jHB­N_rOZA* The 7th
GNOME Forum" and end of 3rd paragraph


Otherwise it looks great!! Thanks for all the hardwork!!

Emily

On Thu, Jul 19, 2012 at 10:30 PM, Diego Escalante Urrelo
<diegoe gnome org> wrote:
Commenting is easy so here I go:

- Isn't Karen's signature a bit "dirty"?

- On the cover, isn't Annual Report a bit missaligned? Or is it just a
printing consideration? Also, the all caps looks a bit "Arialish"

- Why not serif fonts for the main text too? Like in page 8 for
quotes, I believe this is usually easier to read on big text blocks.
(sorry, this is by far the naggiest comment)

- On page 11/12 for Hackfests, the photo that is going to be cut in
the middle... Literally cuts down the girl in the middle. Any chance
to use another (the one with the laptops perhaps, since the middle is
empty, although it looks cool on the left already)?

- On page 19, the interview with Daniel has some weird spacing, I mean
that there is a lot of blank before the title. I fail to see the
reason, I suppose it is some aligment reason.

Now that you hate me, I will go on and say that it looks really cool
:-). Pages are well built, photos well used and the simplicity is
really GNOMEish.

Thank you for all the work, you are my hero <3

On Thu, Jul 19, 2012 at 8:56 PM, Andreas Nilsson <lists andreasn se> wrote:
Hi!
Designed and ready, now ready for proof reading before we print it.
http://andreasn.myownb3.com/temp/annual-report.pdf
- Andreas
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