GNOME project description for EuroOSCON .org day]

[Marcus Bauer <marcus bauer gmail com>]

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>   Comprised of hundreds of volunteer developers and industry-leading  
> companies, the GNOME Foundation is an organization committed to  
> supporting the advancement of GNOME. GNOME is a free software project  
> that provides a complete, easy to use desktop for a variety of  
> operating systems, including GNU/Linux, BSD, Solaris (tm), Operating  
> Environment, HP-UX, Unix, BSD and Apple's Darwin. More than 700  
> computer developers, including over 100 full-time, paid developers,  
> contribute their time and effort to the project.
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Comprised of hundreds of volunteer developers and industry-leading
companies, GNOME is aiming to create a computing environment for the
general public that is completely free software. 

Target platforms are both the desktop as well as embedded devices. At
the same time GNOME is committed to enable people with disabilities
through an elaborated Accessibility framework as the result of several
years of effort.
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