Re: draft GNOME 2.10 press release
- From: Claus Schwarm <c schwarm gmx net>
- To: Luis Villa <luis villa gmail com>
- Cc: John Williams <JWilliams business otago ac nz>, marketing list <marketing-list gnome org>, murrayc murrayc com
- Subject: Re: draft GNOME 2.10 press release
- Date: Thu, 24 Feb 2005 00:46:53 +0100
On Wed, 23 Feb 2005 12:50:53 -0500
Luis Villa <luis villa gmail com> wrote:
[...]
> My current feature list:
>
I never saw a press release that uses a formatted list. Formatted lists
are not used in newspapers, and the whole idea of a press release is to
enable journalists to copy'n'paste the text, literally speaking - I'm
not saying, this happens very often. ;-)
>
> "We're putting our money where our mouth is", said Luis Villa, GNOME
> Foundation Board member. "Instead of talking about vaporware that
> users and ISVs may or may not see in 2005, or 2006, or 2007, GNOME's
> regular release process is getting visible improvements to users twice
> a year, something no proprietary desktop vendor matches."
>
> Sort of aggressive but I like it ;)
>
This is a nice quote. ;-)
On the other hand, the text had superlatives ('the easiest and
friendliest') that journalists really hate to read.
I've attached a a simple, zipped text with some more notes,
demonstrating a possible way to rewrite the feature list. My English is
really bad, so consider it a 'mockup', please. ;-)
It looks a little bit long but everything under 1000 words should be
fine, I guess.
Hope it helps.
Cheers,
Claus
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