Re: Copy for Linux 92



Looks good, send it in!

Maybe for next time, it would be better to arrange a meeting with all the people that want to contribute with the ad's, so that we have enough time to get some drafts ready?
Also, the deadline was 2 days ago as far as i am aware of, so lets pick up the pace next time.

Thats my 2 cents.

Joey

2010/9/2 Máirín Duffy <duffy redhat com>
On Thu, 2010-09-02 at 12:15 -0500, Brian Cameron wrote:
> Máirín:
>
> > Here is the print-ready PDF:
> >
> > http://duffy.fedorapeople.org/temp/gnome/gnomead_final.pdf
>
> This is a cute ad and I do like it.
>
> A few minor criticisms, though.
>
> It seems a bit ambiguous to me.  I would probably think that this was
> an ad for a social networking service for meeting friends who speak
> different languages if I did not already know that GNOME is a desktop.
> I suppose, though, that most people who read a Linux magazine would
> already mostly know what GNOME is, though.
>
> Also, it seems a shame not to highlight that GNOME 3 is soon being
> released in an ad that we place right now.  Perhaps changing "Meet
> GNOME" to "Meet GNOME 3" or adding some "Coming soon...GNOME 3" text
> might help and not be too much work.

http://duffy.fedorapeople.org/temp/gnome/gnomead_final2.pdf

There's an s/build/built correction too.

Good to go?

~m




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