[release-notes] Polish index.page

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit ac80050d2fa8fec3f435022aad739c84f3d34d70
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Wed Sep 8 16:25:40 2021 +0100

    Polish index.page
    
    Another round...

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@@ -58,9 +58,9 @@ xmlns:e="http://projectmallard.org/experimental/"; type="guide" id="index">
     <title>More Power To You</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/power.png"/>
 
-    <p>The power mode setting was originally introduced in the previous GNOME 
-    release, version 40. These allow switching between three power modes, which 
-    affect both performance and power consumption. The modes are:</p>
+    <p>GNOME 40 introduced a new power mode setting. This allows switching 
+    between three power modes, which affect both performance and power
+    consumption:</p>
 
     <list>
       <item><p><gui>Balanced</gui>: the default profile, which provides 
@@ -72,17 +72,18 @@ xmlns:e="http://projectmallard.org/experimental/"; type="guide" id="index">
       consumption.</p></item>
     </list>
     
-    <p>Performance mode is only available on hardware that supports this 
-    feature.</p>
+    <p>Note: performance mode is only available on hardware that supports this 
+    feature. On hardware that doesn't have performance mode, the performance
+    mode option is not shown.</p>
     
     <p>With GNOME 41, the power mode feature has been improved. The mode can 
     now be quickly changed from the <gui>System Status</gui> menu. 
     <gui>Power Saver</gui> mode has been enhanced, so that the screen dims and 
-    fades more rapidly when it is active, and <gui>Power Saver</gui> will now 
-    also automatically turn on when the battery level is low.</p>
+    fades more rapidly when it is active, and <gui>Power Saver</gui> will also
+    automatically turn on when the battery level is low.</p>
     
-    <p>Initial support has been added for allowing applications to request a
-    particular power mode. This is most relevant for allowing performance 
+    <p>Initial support has been added to allow applications to request a
+    particular power mode. This will be most relevant for allowing performance 
     sensitive apps, such as games, to request performance mode.</p>
   </section>
 
@@ -90,18 +91,20 @@ xmlns:e="http://projectmallard.org/experimental/"; type="guide" id="index">
     <title>New Look Software</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/software.png"/>
 
-    <p><app>Software</app> has been given an overhaul for GNOME 41.</p>
+    <p><app>Software</app> has been given an overhaul for GNOME 41, making it
+    look and work better than ever before.</p>
     
     <list>
-      <item><p>The explore view makes it easier to browse and discover apps, 
-      with attractive banners, descriptions of each app.</p></item>
-      <item><p>A new, smaller, set of application categories makes it easier to 
-      browse and explore.</p></item>
+      <item><p>The updated explore view makes it easier to browse and discover
+      apps, with descriptions of each app and more attractive tiles.</p></item>
+      <item><p>A new set of categories makes helps with browsing and exploring
+      available apps.</p></item>
       <item><p>Details pages have a new design, with bigger screenshots and new 
-      information tiles.</p></item>
+      information tiles, which provide a better overview of each application.
+      </p></item>
     </list>
 
-    <p>Almost every part of the application has been polished or improved in
+    <p>Almost every part of <app>Software</app> has been polished or improved in
     some way. This includes redesigned settings, more attractive layouts in the
     installed and updates views, better OS upgrade banners, and much much
     more.</p>
@@ -115,14 +118,14 @@ xmlns:e="http://projectmallard.org/experimental/"; type="guide" id="index">
     <title>Multitasking</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/multitasking.png"/>
 
-    <p>GNOME 41 includes a new Multitasking settings panel, which includes 
-    window management and workspace options. These allow:</p>
+    <p>GNOME 41 includes a new <gui>Multitasking</gui> settings panel, which 
+    includes window management and workspace options. These allow:</p>
 
     <list>
-      <item><p>Disabling the <gui>Activities</gui> hot corner.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Disabling the Activities hot corner.</p></item>
       <item><p>Disabling <gui>Active Screen Edges</gui>.</p></item>
-      <item><p>Configuring a fixed number of <gui>Workspaces</gui>.</p></item>
-      <item><p>Show workspaces on all displays, instead of just the primary 
+      <item><p>Configuring a fixed number of workspaces.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Showing workspaces on all displays, instead of just the primary 
       display.</p></item>
       <item><p>Restricting app switching to the current workspace, when using 
       the <keyseq><key>Super</key><key>Tab</key></keyseq> keyboard shortcut.
@@ -143,18 +146,19 @@ xmlns:e="http://projectmallard.org/experimental/"; type="guide" id="index">
   <section id="mobile-settings">
     <title>Mobile Settings</title>
 
-    <p>GNOME 41 includes a <gui>Mobile</gui> settings panel. This allows 
+    <p>GNOME 41 includes a new <gui>Mobile</gui> settings panel. This allows 
     configuring mobile network connections, and works with 2G, 3G, 4G, and 
     GSM/LTE modems.</p>
  
-    <p>The new <gui>Mobile</gui> panel is only shown when a a supported modem is 
-    present. It allows setting the network type, whether mobile data should be
-    used, and whether data should be used while roaming, as well as other more
-    advanced settings.</p>
+    <p>The new <gui>Mobile</gui> settings are only shown when a a supported 
+    modem is present. It allows setting the network type, selecting whether
+    mobile data should be used, and whether data should be used while roaming,
+    as well as other more advanced settings.</p>
 
     <p>It replaces the previous, old mobile network settings. Improvements 
-    over the old settings include the ability to handle multiple SIMs, and 
-    automatic selection of the network operator.</p>
+    over the old settings include the ability to handle multiple SIMs, and the
+    automatic selection of the network operator, as well as a much nicer user 
+    interface.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="performance">
@@ -172,8 +176,8 @@ xmlns:e="http://projectmallard.org/experimental/"; type="guide" id="index">
       more significant on displays with lower refresh rates).</p></item>
       <item><p>System-level multitouch gestures now behave more reliably and
       consistenty.</p></item>
-      <item><p>GTK 4's GL renderer has been rewritten, resulting in better
-      overall performance and correctness.</p></item>
+      <item><p>GTK 4's GL renderer has been rewritten, resulting in faster 
+      rendering and reduced power consumption.</p></item>
       <item><p>Finally, a major code cleanup has been carried out in Mutter, 
       GNOME's window manager, which will improve long-term maintainability and
       efficiency.</p></item>
@@ -198,16 +202,16 @@ xmlns:e="http://projectmallard.org/experimental/"; type="guide" id="index">
     include:</p>
 
     <list>
-      <item><p><app>Files</app> is now able to create encrypted <sys>.zip</sys>
-      files, requiring a password before they can be opened.</p></item>
-      <item><p><app>Calendar</app> can now import events from <sys>.ics</sys>
-      files.</p></item>
-      <item><p><app>Web</app> has better support for dark mode, faster pinch to
-      zoom (on some websites), and better handling for unresponsive
-      websites.</p></item>
-      <item><p><app>Calculator</app> is now adaptive: resizing the window now 
-      reveals additional controls, and the window will also fit on mobile
-      devices.</p></item>
+      <item><p>The ability to create encrypted <sys>.zip</sys> archives in 
+      <app>Files</app>. These require a password to be opened.</p></item>
+      <item><p>A new <app>Calendar</app> feature that allows importing events 
+      from <sys>.ics</sys> files.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Improved support for dark mode in <app>Web</app>, along with 
+      faster pinch to zoom (on many, but not all websites), and better handling
+      of unresponsive websites.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Better window resizing in <app>Calculator</app>: enlarging the 
+      window will now reveal additional controls, and the window will also
+      shrink down to fit on mobile displays.</p></item>
     </list>
   </section>