[release-notes/gnome-3-6] system settings - improved wording

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit 1bb8542f2cdca2e61083dc10af5211bde0b3d128
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Mon Sep 17 14:26:19 2012 +0100

    system settings - improved wording

 help/C/users-system-settings.page |  115 ++++++++++++++++---------------------
 1 files changed, 50 insertions(+), 65 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/users-system-settings.page b/help/C/users-system-settings.page
index f993521..63e4c99 100644
--- a/help/C/users-system-settings.page
+++ b/help/C/users-system-settings.page
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
 
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="index#users.core"/>
-    <desc>A nicer System Settings shell; several panels have been improved and enhanced.</desc>
+    <desc>Better looking main interface, many settings have also been improved and extended.</desc>
     <credit type="author">
       <name its:translate="no">Olav Vitters</name>
       <email its:translate="no">olav vitters nl</email>
@@ -25,30 +25,24 @@
   <media type="image" src="figures/users-system-settings.png"/>
 
   <p>
-    GNOME 3.6 comes with loads of changes within System Settings.
+    GNOME 3.6 comes with lots of changes to <gui>System Settings</gui>, including 
+    improvements to the main interface as well to individual settings panels.
   </p>
-<!-- TODO:XXX - shortly describe the changes in System Settings in the above paragraph? -->
   <p>
-    The basic interface has received improvements as well. We now 
-    try hard to make the window big enough to not show any scrollbars
-    while still allowing System Settings to be used on small screens. We've
-    furthermore made the icons bigger, as to match Activities Overview. Lastly,
-    the search results are a shown in a nicer way.
+    The main <gui>System Settings</gui> interface has been dramatically improved. It 
+    now includes larger icons and a better layout. All the icons are now displayed 
+    whenever possible, without the need for scrolling, and the window size automatically 
+    adjusts to compensate for small screens. Search results are also shown in a nicer way.
   </p>
 
-  <p>All password handling dialogs check the quality of new passwords used for 
-  system accounts. This is done via <sys>libpwquality</sys>.</p>
-
   <section id="background" style="2column">
     <title>Background</title>
 
     <media type="image" src="figures/users-system-settings-background.png" />
-
     <p>
       We looked at how someone would select a background in 3.4, and noticed a
       number of issues. It was quite easy to accidentally change the current
-      background, while at the same time selecting a new background was quite
-      difficult.
+      background, while selecting a new background was quite difficult.
     </p>
     <p>
       In 3.6, we show the current background as a large thumbnail. When clicked,
@@ -57,10 +51,11 @@
       bigger.
     </p>
     <p>
-      Additionally, we've refreshed the default background in 3.6.
-      The background will gradually change from lighter to dark as the
-      day progresses.  Alternative background have also been provided.
-      For color selection, a nice selection of colors are included.
+      We've also refreshed the default background in 3.6, and have updated the 
+      choice of alternative backgrounds to include some fantastic new images. 
+      Setting a single color as a background has also been improved. These now 
+      include a new set of colors which look even better thanks to the use of an 
+      overlaid texture.
     </p> <note style="tip">
       <title>Tip</title> <p>
         <app xref="users-files">Files</app> and the <app>Image Viewer</app> allow
@@ -75,11 +70,18 @@
 
     <media type="image" src="figures/users-system-settings-mouse-trackpad.png" />
 <!-- http://blogs.gnome.org/mclasen/2012/08/21/rounding-out-the-3-6-feature-list/ -->
+
     <p>
-      If you use a touch device and enable <gui>Content sticks to fingers</gui> you can drag content as if sliding a paper.
+      GNOME 3.6 includes a revamped <gui>Mouse &amp; Touchpad</gui> settings section. The old 
+      settings panel was overhauled to provide a set of options that are much easier 
+      to understand. It also features a new test area which, along with looking great, 
+      also enables scrolling settings to be testing - something that was not possible 
+      previously.
     </p>
     <p>
-      There is a beautiful new area to test your settings. Try it out yourself!
+      If you use a touchpad, the new <gui>Content sticks to fingers</gui> setting allows 
+      you to drag content as if sliding a physical piece of paper. This feature is sometimes 
+      known as Natural Scrolling.
     </p>
   </section>
 
@@ -89,12 +91,12 @@
     <media type="image" src="figures/users-system-settings-online-accounts.png" />
 
     <p>
-      Logging into Online Accounts has been made nicer, as login pages can now
+      Logging into <gui>Online Accounts</gui> has been made nicer, as login pages can now
       appear in your language. We also try to show the mobile version for the
-      login pages, to provide you with a quick and easy to navigate page.
+      login pages, which makes it quickier and easier to use the page.
     </p>
     <p>
-      We further added the following new Online Accounts:
+      We have also added several new types of Online Accounts:
     </p>
     <list>
       <item>
@@ -120,10 +122,9 @@
     <media type="image" src="figures/users-system-settings-sound.png" />
 
     <p>
-      The Sound panel has been simplified by removing the <gui>Hardware</gui> tab.
-      It is no longer necessary, because the device lists on the Input
-      and Output tabs offer more fine-grained choices now. This improvement
-      relies on <sys>Pulseaudio 2.0</sys>.
+      The Sound panel has been made easier to use by removing the <gui>Hardware</gui> tab.
+      Instead, the device lists in the <gui>Input</gui> and <gui>Output</gui> tabs offer more 
+      fine-grained choices. This improvement relies on <sys>Pulseaudio 2.0</sys>.
     </p>
   </section>
 
@@ -134,17 +135,13 @@
 
     <p>
      The <gui>Universal Access</gui> settings have been redesigned in order to offer a more
-     coherent and easy to use experience. All the elements of the Universal
-     Access settings follow the same layout in all the sections and it helps to
-     go through all the settings in a consistent way. The zoom options dialog
-     has been redesigned for accommodating the new Brightness, Contrast,
-     Inversion and Grayscale additions.
+     coherent and easy to use experience. All the elements of the <gui>Universal Access</gui> 
+     settings follow the same layout in all the sections, which provides a more consistent 
+     interface.
     </p>
-    <p>
-      A <link
-      xref="a11y-magnifier-bightness-contrast-inversion"> detailed explanation
-      of the new <app>Brightness, Contrast,
-      Inversion and Grayscale</app> is available</link>.
+    <p>The zoom options dialog has been redesigned to accommodate new settings for brightness, 
+     contrast, inversion and grayscale. A <link xref="a11y-magnifier-bightness-contrast-inversion"> 
+     detailed explanation of these new settings is available</link>.
     </p>
     <comment>
      <p>http://bugzilla.gnome.org/show_bug.cgi?id=665588</p>
@@ -155,18 +152,12 @@
     <title>User Accounts</title>
 
     <p>
-      A major new feature in GNOME 3.6 is the addition of Enterprise
-      logins (also called Active Directory or Kerberos logins). This
-      also includes the ability to enroll your machine in a domain.
-    </p>
-    <p>
-      A technical user could already do this themselves, provided they overcame the following hurdles:
-    </p>
-    <list>
-      <item><p>difficult to set up correctly</p></item>
-      <item><p>difficult to set up in a secure way</p></item>
-      <item><p>heavy reliance on correct time and date</p></item>
-    </list>
+      A major new feature in GNOME 3.6 is the addition of Enterprise logins (also called Active 
+      Directory or Kerberos logins). This allows GNOME to be used in centrally managed and 
+      corporate environments in a much more integrated manner. Users can enroll their computer 
+      with a corporate network, and administrators can deploy GNOME much more easily and 
+      effectively.
+     </p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="network" style="2column">
@@ -175,10 +166,10 @@
     <media type="image" src="figures/users-system-settings-network.png" />
 
     <p>
-      For wireless connections, the network panel now shows all
-      available and remembered access points in a list. You can
-      inspect and forget access points, regardless whether they
-      are currently in range or not.
+      The network settings panel has been improved to make it easier to select wireless 
+      connections. A new list now gives access to all available and remembered wireless 
+      networks. You can inspect and forget access points, regardless whether they are 
+      currently in range or not.
     </p>
   </section>
 
@@ -189,20 +180,14 @@
 
     <p>
       The <gui>Add New Printer</gui> dialog has been greatly improved; it
-      lets you add directly connected printers as well as printers
-      discovered on the local network. You can also enter a printer
-      network address directly.
-    </p>
-
-    <p>
-      It is now possible to select a different driver (or ppd file)
-      for a printer, by clicking on the <gui>Model</gui> field.
+      lets you add directly connected printers as well as printers discovered on a 
+      network. You can also enter a printer network address directly.
     </p>
-
     <p>
-      The <gui style="button">Options</gui> button lets you modify the default values for
-      many printer options that are otherwise available in the
-      print dialog.
+      It is now possible to select a different driver (or ppd file) for a printer, 
+      by clicking on the <gui>Model</gui> field. The <gui style="button">Options</gui> 
+      button also lets you modify the default values for  many printer options that are 
+      otherwise available in the print dialog.
     </p>
   </section>