[release-notes/gnome-3-6] notifications - improve wording

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit b7cf46ce609c750953cef15b0e1b22a55e31c9ac
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Mon Sep 17 12:17:35 2012 +0100

    notifications - improve wording

 help/C/users-notifications.page |   52 +++++++-------------------------------
 1 files changed, 10 insertions(+), 42 deletions(-)
---
diff --git a/help/C/users-notifications.page b/help/C/users-notifications.page
index 524f148..b8d038c 100644
--- a/help/C/users-notifications.page
+++ b/help/C/users-notifications.page
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
 
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="index#users.core"/>
-    <desc>Notifications which are non-intrusive, while still noticeable</desc>
+    <desc>Smarter, more noticable, easier to dismiss.</desc>
     <credit type="author">
       <name its:translate="no">Allan Day</name>
       <email its:translate="no">allanpday gmail com</email>
@@ -22,50 +22,16 @@
 
   <title>Notifications</title>
 
-  <comment>
-    <p>
-      Copy/pasted from http://afaikblog.wordpress.com/2012/08/31/taking-gnome-3-to-the-next-level/
-    </p>
-    <p>
-      Need to split out message stray from notifications.
-    </p>
-  <p>
-   and the online status
-   of contacts is now indicated with an icon. Altogether, these should make the tray and notifications more effective
-   and easier to use.
-  </p>
-  </comment>
-
-  <p>
-   In conception, the GNOME 3 notifications system hits all the right points:
-   give a non-intrusive indication when there is a new notification, let someone
-   inspect it further and respond in place, and provide a place where
-   notifications can be reviewed and interacted with.
-  </p>
-
-  <p>
-   There were, however, issues with the execution of the GNOME 3 notifications
-   model. We observed all of these issues during testing, and it was something
-   that we received a lot of feedback on. Well, we listened, and we came up with
-   something better.
-  </p>
-
   <!-- TODO:XXX - screenshot -->
 
   <p>
-    There are quite a few changes to notifications included in 3.6. Read on for
-    the highlights.
+    GNOME's notification popups have had quite a few refinements for 3.6
   </p>
 
   <section id="less-intrusive" style="2column">
-    <title>Less Intrusive</title>
+    <title>Smarter</title>
     <p>
-      Until GNOME 3.6, notifications were either all or nothing. Either you see
-      all of them, or you could turn them off completely in the <gui>User
-      Menu</gui>.
-    </p>
-    <p>
-      As of GNOME 3.6, we try to be smarter about this. If you're running a
+      Notifications have got smarter for GNOME 3.6. If you're running a
       full screen application or game, we only show you your important
       notifications. All other notifications are delayed until you stop using
       your full screen application.
@@ -75,8 +41,8 @@
   <section id="more-noticeable" style="2column">
     <title>More Noticeable</title>
     <p>
-      We've tweaked the behavior of the notification popups to make sure that
-      you've seen the notification. No longer will you miss out on a
+      We've tweaked the behavior of notification popups to make sure that
+      you see all your notifications. No longer will you miss out on a
       notification as we only hide a notification after we know you've
       interacted with the system.
     </p>
@@ -84,8 +50,10 @@
 
   <section id="easier-to-dismiss" style="2column">
     <title>Easier To Dismiss</title>
-    <p>Close buttons have been added.</p>
+    <p>
+    Notification bubbles now feature close buttons. This makes it much clearer
+    how to dismiss a notification.
+    </p>
   </section>
 
-
 </page>