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[gnome-user-docs] Updated accounts pages

commit fa6f7c0eeb4a099d78920cedbcd7cb150ca15149
Author: Michael Hill <mdhill src gnome org>
Date:   Wed Aug 15 00:35:42 2012 -0400

    Updated accounts pages

 gnome-help/C/accounts-add.page                    |   12 +++--
 gnome-help/C/accounts-create.page                 |   33 ++++++-----
 gnome-help/C/accounts-disable-service.page        |    3 +-
 gnome-help/C/accounts-password.page               |   59 ---------------------
 gnome-help/C/accounts-provider-not-available.page |   18 ++++--
 gnome-help/C/accounts-which-application.page      |   25 +++++----
 gnome-help/C/accounts-whyadd.page                 |   12 +++--
 gnome-help/C/accounts.page                        |    2 +-
 8 files changed, 64 insertions(+), 100 deletions(-)
---
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/accounts-add.page b/gnome-help/C/accounts-add.page
index fce2e1b..5c75f7e 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/accounts-add.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/accounts-add.page
@@ -6,11 +6,15 @@
   <desc>Connect an online account</desc>
   <link type="guide" xref="accounts"/>
   <link type="seealso" xref="accounts-disable-service"/>
-  <revision pkgversion="3.4.0" version="0.1" date="2012-02-19" status="reviewed"/>
+  <revision pkgversion="3.5.5" version="0.1" date="2012-08-14" status="review"/>
   <credit type="author">
     <name>Jim Campbell</name>
     <email>jwcampbell gmail com</email>
   </credit>
+  <credit type="editor">
+    <name>Michael Hill</name>
+    <email>mdhillca gmail com</email>
+  </credit>
 </info>
 
 <title>Add an account</title>
@@ -22,13 +26,13 @@ will be set up for you.</p>
 <steps>
   <item><p>Click the <gui>Plus</gui> symbol in the lower-left
 portion of the window.</p></item>
-  <item><p>Select your account type from the list.</p>
+  <item><p>Click the <gui>Account Type</gui> menu and select one.</p>
         <p>If you have more than one account type, you can add the other
         accounts at a later time.</p></item>
   <item><p>Click <gui>Add...</gui></p></item>
   <item><p>A small website window will open where you can enter your
-  online account credentials. For example, if you are setting up a <em>
-  Google</em> account, enter your <em>Google</em> username and password.</p>
+  online account credentials. For example, if you are setting up a Google
+  account, enter your Google username and password.</p>
   </item>
   <item><p>If you've entered your credentials correctly, you will be prompted
   to allow GNOME access to your online account. Select <gui>Grant Access</gui>
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/accounts-create.page b/gnome-help/C/accounts-create.page
index 858ed99..ec6a02e 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/accounts-create.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/accounts-create.page
@@ -3,7 +3,7 @@
       id="accounts-create">
 
   <info>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.4.0" date="2012-02-19" status="outdated"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.5.5" date="2012-08-14" status="review"/>
     <link type="guide" xref="accounts" />
 
     <credit type="author">
@@ -14,6 +14,10 @@
       <name>Julita Inca</name>
       <email>yrazes gmail com</email>
     </credit>
+    <credit type="editor">
+      <name>Michael Hill</name>
+      <email>mdhillca gmail com</email>
+    </credit>
 
     <desc>Create a new account using Online Accounts.</desc>
 
@@ -31,38 +35,37 @@
       overview.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>Click <gui>+</gui></p>
+      <p>Click <gui style="button">+</gui>.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>Select an <gui>Account Type</gui> from the drop down menu, some
+      <p>Select an <gui>Account Type</gui> from the drop down menu. Some
       account types may <link xref="accounts-provider-not-available">not be
-      available</link></p>
+      available</link>.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>Click <gui>Addâ</gui> to continue</p>
+      <p>Click <gui>Addâ</gui> to continue.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
       <p>Find and click the <gui>Sign Up</gui> button or link on the page which
-      appears</p>
+      appears.</p>
       <note>
 	<p>Not all online account providers offer the option to create an
-	account at this stage; if the service which you wish to register with
-	does not provide the option to register an account at this point,
-	you will need to use an alternative method to create an account</p>
+	account at this stage. If this is true of the service you wish to register,
+	you will need to use an alternative method to create an account.</p>
       </note>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>Fill in the registration form: you will normally be asked for some
-      personal details such as a username and password</p>
+      <p>Fill in the registration form. You will typically be asked for some
+      personal details such as username and password.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
-      <p>You will be asked whether to grant GNOME access to your new account:
-      allow GNOME to access your account to use it with <app>Online
-      Accounts</app></p>
+      <p>You need to grant GNOME access to your new account in order to use it
+       with <app>Online Accounts</app>.</p>
     </item>
     <item>
       <p>All services that are offered by an account provider will be enabled
-      by default, switch off individual services to disable them</p>
+      by default. <link xref="accounts-disable-service">Switch off</link>
+      individual services to disable them.</p>
     </item>
   </steps>
 
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/accounts-disable-service.page b/gnome-help/C/accounts-disable-service.page
index 50dafe2..1dad0c2 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/accounts-disable-service.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/accounts-disable-service.page
@@ -8,11 +8,12 @@
 
   <link type="guide" xref="accounts"/>
 
-  <revision pkgversion="3.4.0" version="0.1" date="2012-02-19" status="outdated"/>
+  <revision pkgversion="3.5.5" version="0.1" date="2012-08-14" status="review"/>
   <credit type="author">
     <name>Phil Bull</name>
     <email>philbull gmail com</email>
   </credit>
+    
 </info>
 
 <title>Control which online services an account can be used to access</title>
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/accounts-provider-not-available.page b/gnome-help/C/accounts-provider-not-available.page
index 9ca52b5..0d7ac81 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/accounts-provider-not-available.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/accounts-provider-not-available.page
@@ -5,30 +5,36 @@
 <info>
   <link type="guide" xref="accounts"/>
 
-  <revision pkgversion="3.4.0" version="0.1" date="2012-02-19" status="reviewed"/>
+  <revision pkgversion="3.5.5" version="0.1" date="2012-08-14" status="review"/>
   <credit type="author">
     <name>Baptiste Mille-Mathias</name>
     <email>baptistem gnome org</email>
   </credit>
+  <credit type="editor">
+    <name>Michael Hill</name>
+    <email>mdhillca gmail com</email>
+  </credit>
 
-  <desc>The online service providers are not listed?</desc>
+  <desc>What if an online service provider is not listed?</desc>
 
 </info>
 
   <title>Why isn't my account type on the list?</title>
 
-  <p>To have support of your favorite some has to develop it. Currently, only a
-  few types of online accounts are supported:</p>
+  <p>Support for your favorite online service provider needs someone to develop
+   it. Currently, only a few types of online accounts are supported:</p>
   <list>
     <item><p>Google</p></item>
     <item><p>Windows Live</p></item>
+    <item><p>Facebook</p></item>
+    <item><p>Twitter</p></item>
   </list>
 
-<p>Support for Twitter, Facebook and Yahoo should be added in the near future.</p>
+<p>Support for Yahoo should be added in the near future.</p>
 
 <note style="advanced">
  <p>If you're interested in adding support for other services, contact the
- developers of the <link href="https://bugzilla.gnome.org/enter_bug.cgi?product=gnome-online-accounts";>
+ developers on the <link href="https://bugzilla.gnome.org/enter_bug.cgi?product=gnome-online-accounts";>
  bug tracker</link>.</p>
 </note>
 
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/accounts-which-application.page b/gnome-help/C/accounts-which-application.page
index 1d99426..130f040 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/accounts-which-application.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/accounts-which-application.page
@@ -2,33 +2,38 @@
       type="topic" style="task"
       id="accounts-which-application">
   <info>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.4.0" version="0.1" date="2012-02-26" status="reviewed"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.5.5" version="0.1" date="2012-08-14" status="review"/>
 
     <credit type="author copyright">
       <name>Baptiste Mille-Mathias</name>
       <email>baptistem gnome org</email>
       <years>2012</years>
     </credit>
+    <credit type="editor">
+      <name>Michael Hill</name>
+      <email>mdhillca gmail com</email>
+    </credit>
 
     <link type="guide" xref="accounts"/>
     <link type="seealso" xref="accounts-disable-service"/>
 
-    <desc>Lists applications can use the accounts created in <app>Online
-    Accounts</app> and the services they can exploit.</desc>
+    <desc>Applications can use the accounts created in <app>Online Accounts</app>
+     and the services they exploit.</desc>
   </info>
 
   <title>Which applications take advantage of online-accounts?</title>
 
   <p><app>Online Accounts</app> can be used by external applications to
-  automatically configure themself.</p>
+  automatically configure themselves.</p>
 
   <section id="accounts-google-services">
    <title>With a Google account</title>
 
    <list>
-    <item><p><app>Evolution</app>, the mail application, your mail account will
-    be automatically added, so it'll pick your mail, you'll have access to your
-    contact and the calendar will present you the item in your Google agenda.
+    <item><p><app>Evolution</app>, the email application. Your email account will
+    be added to <app>Evolution</app> automatically, so it will retrieve your
+    mail, give you access to your contacts, and display your calendar items in
+    your Google agenda.
     </p></item>
     <item><p><app>Empathy</app>, the instant messaging application. Your online
     account will be added and you'll be able to communicate with your friends.
@@ -41,10 +46,10 @@
   </section>
 
   <section id="accounts-windows-services">
-   <title>With a Windows Live account</title>
+   <title>With Windows Live, Facebook or Twitter accounts</title>
 
-   <p><app>Empathy</app> can use the account to connect you online and chat
-   with your Windows Live contacts.</p>
+   <p><app>Empathy</app> can use these accounts to connect you online and chat
+   with your contacts, friends, and followers.</p>
 
   </section>
 </page>
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/accounts-whyadd.page b/gnome-help/C/accounts-whyadd.page
index 856b95d..45660ed 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/accounts-whyadd.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/accounts-whyadd.page
@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
       type="topic" style="question"
       id="accounts-whyadd">
   <info>
-    <revision version="0.1" date="2012-02-19" status="outdated"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.5.5" version="0.1" date="2012-08-14" status="review"/>
 
     <link type="guide" xref="accounts"/>
 
@@ -11,8 +11,12 @@
       <email>ihmis suski gmail com</email>
       <years>2012</years>
     </credit>
+    <credit type="editor">
+      <name>Michael Hill</name>
+      <email>mdhillca gmail com</email>
+    </credit>
 
-    <desc>Answers the question whether or not you should add your email or social media accounts to your desktop</desc>
+    <desc>Why add your email or social media accounts to your desktop?</desc>
   </info>
 
   <title>Why should I add an account?</title>
@@ -20,8 +24,8 @@
   straight to your desktop and makes the information of the services a seamless part of
   your user experience. By adding accounts you can easily keep in touch with services of
   different accounts, like chats, at the same time. Just set your account once and every
-  time you start your computer all the accounts and services you chose to add are ready
-  for you.</p>
+  time you start your computer all the accounts and services you've added are ready for
+  you.</p>
 
 </page>
 
diff --git a/gnome-help/C/accounts.page b/gnome-help/C/accounts.page
index 8812c93..4f783e2 100644
--- a/gnome-help/C/accounts.page
+++ b/gnome-help/C/accounts.page
@@ -7,7 +7,7 @@
 
   <link type="guide" xref="prefs"/>
 
-  <revision pkgversion="3.4.0" version="0.1" date="2012-02-19" status="outdated"/>
+  <revision pkgversion="3.5.5" version="0.1" date="2012-08-14" status="review"/>
   <credit type="author">
     <name>Phil Bull</name>
     <email>philbull gmail com</email>
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