[release-notes/gnome-3-2] rewrite introduction yet again

[Olav Vitters <ovitters src gnome org>]

commit 8b3dc87ce161054424df65fe3cb160b26c418413
Author: Olav Vitters <olav vitters nl>
Date:   Mon Sep 12 16:39:39 2011 +0200

    rewrite introduction yet again

 help/C/release-notes.xml |   21 ++++++++++++---------
 1 files changed, 12 insertions(+), 9 deletions(-)
---
diff --git a/help/C/release-notes.xml b/help/C/release-notes.xml
index 3d316a8..703d51d 100644
--- a/help/C/release-notes.xml
+++ b/help/C/release-notes.xml
@@ -55,19 +55,22 @@
       <para>
         The GNOME Project is an international community which works to make 
         great software available to all. GNOME's focus is ease of use, 
-        stability, and first-class internationalization and accessibility 
+        stability, first-class internationalization as well as accessibility
         support. GNOME is Free and Open Source Software. This means that 
         all our work is free to use, modify 
-        and redistribute, and everyone is welcome to participate in its 
-        creation. If you would like to help make our products even better, 
-        <ulink url="http://live.gnome.org/JoinGnome";>you can join us</ulink>. 
+        and redistribute.
       </para>
       <para>
-        You can also support us by becoming a <ulink 
-        url="http://www.gnome.org/friends/";>Friend of GNOME</ulink> and 
-        follow us on <ulink url="http://identi.ca/gnome";>Identi.ca</ulink>, 
-        <ulink url="https://twitter.com/GNOME";>Twitter</ulink> or <ulink 
-        url="https://www.facebook.com/GNOMEDesktop";>Facebook</ulink>.
+        If you would like to help make our products even better, 
+        <ulink url="http://live.gnome.org/JoinGnome";>you can join us</ulink>. Or
+        follow our progress on <ulink
+          url="http://identi.ca/gnome";>Identi.ca</ulink>, <ulink
+          url="https://twitter.com/GNOME";>Twitter</ulink> or <ulinkÂ
+          url="https://www.facebook.com/GNOMEDesktop";>Facebook</ulink>.
+      </para>
+      <para>
+        You can also support us financially by becoming a <ulink
+          url="http://www.gnome.org/friends/";>Friend of GNOME</ulink>.
       </para>
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       <para>