Re: [Draft]Call for hosts for GNOME.Asia Summit 2015

[Oliver Propst <oliver propst gmail com>]

Yeah looks good to me to, just some minor comments.

On Wed, Jul 16, 2014 at 7:52 AM, Emily Chen <emilychen522 gmail com> wrote:
> hi all,
>
> Here is is the draft of the call for bid GNOME.Asia 2015.
> Call for hosts for GNOME.Asia Summit 2015

> The GNOME.Asia committee will assist in the process, but there is a
> definitive need for individuals to be actively involved and committed
> to the planning and delivery of the event.
Would be maybe perfer  "the planning and execution of the event".

> You can learn more about GNOME.Asia Summit at our official website:
> http://www.gnome.asia
Think  "You can learn more about GNOME.Asia Summit at our website"
will do just fine.


> For those of you who would be interested in hosting the next
> GNOME.Asia Summit in 2015 you are hereby invited to submit a formal
> proposal to the gnome-asia-committee-list<at>gnome<dot> org . The
> deadline for the proposals is September 1, 2014. Please email your
> proposal to gnome-asia-committee-list<at>gnome<dot> org.


I think its a good idea to be clear that the committee wants prosals
to be in a open format such as PDF (so you don't get .doxc files for
example), there I suggest the following wording
"Please email your proposal to gnome-asia-committee-list<at>gnome<dot>
org. in a open format such as PDF".


> * Provide plans for fundraising at a local level.
This is about local sponsors right? If so I would change the wording to
"Provide plans for local sponsorship's."

> Please also check the GNOME.Asia Summit check list [2], howtos [3] and a > winning proposal for the year 
> 2012 [4] when putting together a proposal.
to
"Please also check the GNOME.Asia Summit check list [2], howtos [3]
the winning proposal for 2012 [4] when putting together a proposal."

And finally
> Feel
> free to contact gnome-asia-committee-list gnome org if you
> have any questions.
to
"You are welcome to contact gnome-asia-committee-list gnome org if you
have any questions."

If you agree on the changes I have suggested I can a revised copy of
the call for host.

-- 
-mvh Oliver Propst