Re: Regarding DHCP Desktop Help article

[Phil Bull <philbull gmail com>]

Hi Mewshi,

Thanks for submitting this! I've reviewed it and have a few comments:

      * The topic is well written. I particularly like the flow of the
        text (except for the use of the word "facilitating" ;)
      * The technical level of the article is too advanced; it should
        target non-technical users and so no understanding of networking
        concepts should be assumed. In fact, the whole article is to do
        with a networking concept, so it might be worth building up the
        reader's background understanding a little so that the
        explanation of DHCP itself is easier to grasp. This might
        include discussion of what an IP address is.
      * There are a few jargon words in there (protocol, assignment, IP
        addresses, server, router), each of which would need a
        reader-friendly explanation when used.
      * I don't think that the introductory paragraph is required, as it
        doesn't impart much useful information to the reader except for
        the definition of the acronym. Better to jump straight in with a
        basic explanation, e.g. "DHCP is the way that your computer gets
        an address on a network. Each computer on a network needs a
        unique address..."

In summary, I think it's a good start, but we need to bring the
technical level down a notch or two. DHCP is quite a technical concept,
so this might be quite a challenge.

Thanks again,

Phil

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