[totem/mallard-documentation: 4/90] help: Review introduction.page

[Jeremy Bicha <jbicha src gnome org>]

commit 21b2ff3e3feea43b186fd50ddd6b42d6089b156b
Author: Ekaterina Gerasimova <kittykat3756 gmail com>
Date:   Wed Mar 7 22:10:17 2012 +0000

    help: Review introduction.page

 help/C/introduction.page | 21 ++++++++++++++-------
 1 file changed, 14 insertions(+), 7 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/introduction.page b/help/C/introduction.page
index ce64ecc9..814f92e5 100644
--- a/help/C/introduction.page
+++ b/help/C/introduction.page
@@ -4,12 +4,19 @@
 
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="index"/>
-    <desc>Welcome to the <app>Totem Movie Player</app>, GNOME application for
-    playing music and movies.</desc>
+
+    <desc>Welcome to the <app>Totem Movie Player</app>, the GNOME application
+    for playing music and movies.</desc>
+
     <credit type="author">
       <name>Marta Bogdanowicz</name>
       <email>majus85 gmail com</email>
     </credit>
+    <credit type="editor">
+      <name>Ekaterina Gerasimova</name>
+      <email>kittykat3756 gmail com</email>
+    </credit>
+
     <license>
       <p>Creative Commons Share Alike 3.0</p>
     </license>
@@ -17,13 +24,13 @@
 
   <title>Introduction</title>
 
-  <p><app>Totem Movie Player</app> is an application for palying media, video as
-  well as audio. With it you can watch movies, listen to the music or create
-  your personal playlists.</p>
+  <p><app>Totem Movie Player</app> is an application for playing media, it can
+  play video, as well as audio. You can use it to watch movies, listen to music
+  or create playlists.</p>
 
   <note style="advanced">
-    <p><app>Totem</app> is based on <gui>GStreamer</gui>. This is a plugin-based
-    multimedia framework. Thanks to <gui>GStreamer</gui> <app>Totem</app> has
+    <p><app>Totem</app> is based on <gui>GStreamer</gui>, a plugin-based
+    multimedia framework. Thanks to <gui>GStreamer</gui>, <app>Totem</app> has
     superior extensibility and supports a larger variety of media formats.</p>
   </note>