[release-notes/gnome-3-30: 12/21] Rewrite Screen Sharing indicator section

[Link Dupont <link src gnome org>]

commit b65c03c62877d8d9bf0208eacde6a84e0674ad09
Author: Link Dupont <link sub-pop net>
Date:   Mon Aug 13 08:19:34 2018 -0700

    Rewrite Screen Sharing indicator section

 help/C/index.page | 4 ++--
 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/index.page b/help/C/index.page
index 8fd0a5cc..5d9e2944 100644
--- a/help/C/index.page
+++ b/help/C/index.page
@@ -33,9 +33,9 @@
   contributors.</p>
 
   <section id="screen-sharing">
-    <title>Screen Sharing</title>
+    <title>Improved Screen Sharing</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>With GNOME &gnomeversion;, it is now possible to control screen sharing and remote desktop sessions 
through a newly added system menu. When screen sharing is enabled, an indicator to that effect is displayed 
in the panel. And with pipewire, this works both in Wayland and X11 sessions.</p>
+    <p>With GNOME &gnomeversion;, it is now easier than ever to control screen sharing and remote desktop 
sessions. A newly added system menu displays an indicator when a remote connection is active, making it easy 
to stop the session when finished.</p>
   </section>
   
   <section id="software-update">