[release-notes/gnome-3-24] final tweaks

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit 9ff2ac44e2b551ce4ff0d3a4b0d84be11d956718
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Mon Mar 13 20:06:33 2017 +0000

    final tweaks

 help/C/developers.page |    6 +++---
 help/C/index.page      |   23 ++++++++++++-----------
 2 files changed, 15 insertions(+), 14 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/developers.page b/help/C/developers.page
index bc061dc..c53e8f3 100644
--- a/help/C/developers.page
+++ b/help/C/developers.page
@@ -31,17 +31,17 @@
     <p>Builder has made significant progress for 3.24, with a number of major new features. This includes 
enhanced support for a range of build systems, including Flatpak, CMake, Meson and Rust. This has been 
enabled by a new <link href="https://blogs.gnome.org/chergert/2017/02/17/builders-build-pipeline/";>build 
pipeline architecture</link>, which allows different build systems to be more easily supported.</p>
     <p>Clicking a few buttons is all it takes to set up a development environment in 3.24, thanks to the 
ability to install and update SDKs and toolchains directly from Builder (either for Flatpak or Rust).</p>
     <p><link href="http://valgrind.org/";>Valgrind</link> integration makes it easy to profile your project. 
If Valgrind is available (as it always is with a Flatpak SDK), it is available from the run menu — just 
select it to run your project with it.</p>
-    <p>Flatpak support has had a significant amount of polish since last release, making it far more 
reliable and thoroughly integrated. This means it is now possible to seamlessly clone and build many GNOME 
applications using Flatpak, all from within Builder. This is a major step forward for the GNOME developer 
experience, and avoids the need to manually build a fragile dependency chain with JHBuild.</p>
+    <p>Flatpak support has had a significant amount of polish since last release, making it far more 
reliable and thoroughly integrated. This means it is now possible to seamlessly clone and build many GNOME 
applications using Flatpak, all from within Builder. This is a major step forward for the GNOME developer 
experience, and avoids the need to build a fragile dependency chain in order to contribute.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="flatpak">
     <title>Flatpak</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <!-- Releases since 3.22 - 0.8.3, 0.8.2, 0.8.1, 0.8.0, 0.6.14, 0.6.13, 0.6.12 -->
-    <p>While Flatpak is an independent upstream project, the GNOME project is actively promoting its use as 
a part of its developer experience. Since the 3.22 release, Flatpak has made significant progress. There have 
been a total of eight Flatpak releases since then, which have introduced a host of major new features and 
improvements.</p>
+    <p>While Flatpak is independent project of the GNOME project, GNOME is actively promoting its use as a 
part of its developer experience. Since the 3.22 release, Flatpak has made significant progress. There have 
been a total of eight Flatpak releases since then, which have introduced a host of major new features and 
improvements.</p>
     <list>
       <item><p>Applications can now specify where their runtime can be downloaded from. This allows Flatpak 
to automatically download the required runtime for an application, if it isn’t installed.</p></item>
-      <item><p>A new 0.8.0 stable series has been introduced, which provides a path for long-term support 
distributions to ship Flatpak.</p></item>
+      <item><p>A new 0.8.0 stable series has been introduced, which provides a path for long-term support 
distributions to include Flatpak.</p></item>
       <item><p>The command line interface has been reworked and improved.</p></item>
       <item><p>Flatpak now supports downloading URIs as a part of application installation. This allows 
applications like Spotify and Skype to be supported.</p></item>
       <item><p>OpenGL driver support allows applications to use proprietary drivers, if they are already 
installed on the host system.</p></item>
diff --git a/help/C/index.page b/help/C/index.page
index 1126542..bfcd7c7 100644
--- a/help/C/index.page
+++ b/help/C/index.page
@@ -94,8 +94,8 @@
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>The notification area has received a round of improvements for 3.24. The 
     notifications list has a simpler, clearer layout, which makes it easier to 
-    read previous notifications. A number of other notifications bugs have been 
-    fixed as a part of this effort, in order to provide a smoother 
+    read previous notifications. A number of other notifications bugs have also 
+    been fixed as a part of this effort, in order to provide a smoother 
     notifications experience.</p>
     <p>Weather information has also been integrated into the notifications 
     area. This shows a simple summary of the day’s forecast, for the location 
@@ -112,7 +112,7 @@
     usability issues in the previous design, and a a new popover shows a list 
     of open tabs, making it easier to navigate when you have a large number of 
     pages open.</p>
-    <p>Bookmarking has also been overhauled, with a new simple one click 
+    <p>Bookmarking has also been overhauled, with a new, simple, one-click 
     interface for bookmarking pages, a bookmarks popover for quickly accessing 
     your bookmarks, and a new interface for easily organizing your 
     bookmarks.</p>
@@ -175,14 +175,14 @@
     </list>
     <p>Games has had a lot of interface improvements for 3.24, such as improved 
     feedback when loading games, better window handling, and more helpful error 
-    messages.</p>
+    messages. It has also gained the ability to play Libretro games.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="updated-icons">
     <title>Bigger, Brighter Icons</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/adwaita-324-updates.png"/>
     <p>GNOME’s high resolution icons got even bigger for 3.24, doubling in size 
-    from <em>256×256px</em> to <em>512×512px</em>. This means that the icons 
+    from <em>256×256px</em> to <em>512×512px</em>. This means that these icons 
     are more detailed on high density displays.</p>
     <p>The visual style of many of the device, file type and application icons 
     has also been improved, with a new more streamlined look. Extraneous bevels 
@@ -198,7 +198,7 @@
     3.24. Significantly, Wacom settings and tablet handling are now compatible 
     with Wayland, meaning that Wacom users no longer have an excuse not to 
     switch from X11.</p>
-    <p>Styli handling has also been improved: styli can now be configured 
+    <p>Stylus configuration has also been improved: styli can now be configured 
     independently, allowing you to move them between tablets and keep the same 
     configuration. Styli can also be configured using presets for different 
     devices.</p>
@@ -225,11 +225,12 @@
       the display of how much disk space each application is taking up, in the 
       installed view.
       </p></item>
-      <item><p><app>Files</app> now allows restricted files and folders to be 
-      easily opened using administrator privileges. Just double-click on the 
-      file or folder and a dialog window will allow you to enter a password in 
-      order to continue. This provides a much safer way to open restricted 
-      locations, compared with using root or sudo from the command line.</p></item>
+      <item><p><app>Files</app> now makes it easier and safter to work with 
+      restricted files and folders. If you try to do something that requires 
+      additional permissions, you will be automatically asked to enter a 
+      password. This provides a much safer way to work with restricted files 
+      and folders, compared with running the application with sudo or root.
+      </p></item>
       <item><p>Software’s Flatpak support, which was introduced last release,
       has been improved. In particular, updating Flatpak applications is much 
       smoother. Support for new Flatpak capabilities, such as automatic