[release-notes/gnome-3-22] integrate bastian ilso's feedback

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit d2ffbad0dfb0a5ad3671c6f8706e07eee61e7b66
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Fri Sep 9 11:37:30 2016 +0100

    integrate bastian ilso's feedback

 help/C/index.page |   20 +++++++++-----------
 1 files changed, 9 insertions(+), 11 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/index.page b/help/C/index.page
index a2435b5..d681d53 100644
--- a/help/C/index.page
+++ b/help/C/index.page
@@ -35,15 +35,15 @@
   <p>3.20 has been named “Karlsruhe” in recognition of this year’s GUADEC
   organizing team. <link href="http://guadec.org/";>GUADEC</link> is GNOME’s
   primary conference, which is held in Europe each year, and is only possible
-  due to local volunteers.</p>
+  due to the amazing work of local volunteers.</p>
 
   <section id="flatpak-integration">
     <title>Flatpak Integration</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p><link href="http://flatpak.org/";>Flatpak</link> is the next generation
-    application distribution framework for Linux. It aims to make it easier to
-    distribute applications for Linux, and thereby increase the number of
-    applications that are available. Flatpak applications have other
+    application distribution framework for Linux. This technology aims to make
+    it easier to distribute applications for Linux, and thereby increase the
+    number of applications that are available. Flatpak applications have other
     advantages, too: they are more secure, and can be safely updated without
     having to reboot.</p>
     <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; comes with comprehensive Flatpak support. The
@@ -136,9 +136,8 @@
     <link href="https://www.gnome.org/outreachy/";>Outreachy</link> internship.
     </p>
     <p>Other UI enhancements include automatic hiding of the floating status
-    bar, so it doesn’t get in the way, and the display of more information in
-    the connect to server bar, including details about which file protocols are
-    supported.
+    bar, so it doesn’t get in the way, and the inclusion of extra information
+    about connecting to servers, including which file protocols are supported.
     </p>
     <p>Finally, you can now work with files with admin privileges over
     <code>admin:///</code>.</p>
@@ -176,10 +175,9 @@
       editing has restyled date pickers. In the calendar grid, events can now
       be moved using drag and drop, and the layout of the year view has been
       refined and its layout now adjusts to the size of the window.</p></item>
-      <item><p>Automatic NickServ authentication has been added to Polari,
-      GNOME’s IRC client. This means that instead of manually messaging
-      NickServ each time you log in, all you have to do is enter your password
-      into the server settings.</p></item>
+      <item><p>In Polari, GNOME's IRC client, if you identify yourself to
+      NickServ, you will be asked if the password shhould be remembered, and
+      will be automatically logged in in the future.</p></item>
       <item><p>Maps now uses <link href="https://www.mapbox.com/";>Mapbox</link>
       as the supplier of its
       <link href="https://www.openstreetmap.org/";>OpenStreetMap</link> data.