[release-notes/gnome-3-22] refine most of the index page

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit 19ca90e5c7290dca4ade78c8f2f739b73ccd1a81
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Mon Sep 5 16:47:38 2016 +0100

    refine most of the index page

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 1 files changed, 44 insertions(+), 36 deletions(-)
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@@ -34,38 +34,44 @@
 
   <p>3.20 has been named “Karlsruhe” in recognition of this year’s GUADEC
   organizing team. <link href="http://guadec.org/";>GUADEC</link> is GNOME’s
-  main annual conference, and is only possible due to the hard work of local 
-  volunteers.</p>
+  main conference, which is held in Europe each year, and is only possible due
+  to local volunteers.</p>
 
   <section id="flatpak-integration">
     <title>Flatpak Integration</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p><link href="http://flatpak.org/";>Flatpak</link> is the application
-    distribution framework for Linux. It brings a host of improvements for
-    application developers, with the goal of making a greater range of
-    applications available for users. It also offers much improved security and
-    privacy features.</p>
-    <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; comes with comprehsive Flatpak support. Software
-    now allows the installation of downloaded Flatpak repository files, which
-    makes it possible to add a Flatpak software repository with a couple of
-    clicks. A range of other smaller changes make it easy to use Flatpaks on
-    your computer.</p>
-    <p>GNOME's development technologies now integrate with Flatpak's security
-    features, allowing applications to have much greater protections for users
-    in the future.</p>
+    <p><link href="http://flatpak.org/";>Flatpak</link> is the next generation
+    application distribution framework for Linux. It aims to make it easier to
+    distribute applications for Linux, in the hope of increasing the number of
+    applications that are available. Flatpak also has advantages for users.
+    Flatpak applications are more secure, and can be safely updated without
+    having to reboot.</p>
+    <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; comes with comprehsive Flatpak support. The
+    Software application is now able to install repository files, which means
+    that it is possible to install Flatpak repositories and applications
+    without ever having to use the command line. Numerous other smaller
+    changes makes it easy to install and update Flatpak applications, such as
+    the display of source information for each application as well as details
+    about whether applications are sandboxed.</p>
+    <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; also introduces developer tools which allow
+    applications to take full advantage of Flatpak's security features. This
+    will allow applications to have much greater protections for users in the
+    future.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="bulk-renaming">
     <title>Bulk Renaming</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>Bulk renaming is a new feature in Files for &gnomeversion;. As the name
-    suggests, it allows multiple files to be renamed at the same time. This is
-    extremely useful when dealing with collections of files that have similar
-    names, such as videos, music or photos.</p>
-    <p>Files can be renamed either using a template that is applied to each
+    <p>Bulk renaming is a new feature in the Files application for
+    &gnomeversion;. As the name suggests, bulk renaming allows multiple files
+    to be renamed at the same time. This is extremely useful when dealing with
+    collections of files that have similar names, such as videos, music or
+    photos.</p>
+    <p>Files can be renamed using either a template that is applied to each
     file, or using a function that allows specific parts of all the file names
-    to be replaced. The template mode allows using details from your photos as
-    a part of the file name, such as the date taken or the camera model.</p>
+    to be replaced. The template mode allows using details from your files to
+    be included as part of the file name, such as the creation date, or the
+    track number, artist name or album name for music files.</p>
     <p>To access the bulk rename feature, simply select multiple files and then
     rename using the context menu or <key>F2</key> shortcut.</p>
   </section>
@@ -73,10 +79,9 @@
   <section id="photo-sharing">
     <title>Photo Sharing</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>Last release, Photos gained the ability to edit photos, with a really
-    easy non-destructive set of editing tools. For &gnomeversion; it is gaining
-    another critical feature for photographers: the ability to share photos
-    with other people.</p>
+    <p>Last release, Photos gained a new set of photo editing features. For
+    &gnomeversion;, another critical feature is being introduced: the ability
+    to share photos with other people.</p>
     <p>The new sharing feature allows sharing photos by uploading them to
     Google, or by sending them as an email attachment. Further sharing
     destinations are planned for the future, including a range of social
@@ -90,12 +95,13 @@
     <title>Improved Software</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>The Software application has a new look for GNOME &gnomeversion;. The
-    landing page has been revamped, with more application tiles and a colorful
-    category browser. Star ratings are now prominently displayed to make it
-    quick and easy to choose the best applications to install.</p>
+    landing page has been revamped and now shows more application tiles. A new,
+    colorful category section makes browsing a more integral part of the
+    experience. Star ratings are also being displayed more prominently, in
+    order to make it easier to find the best applications to install.</p>
     <p>Software has other smaller improvements, too. Color coded badges now
-    clearly indicate whether an application is Free Software, including
-    improved layouts in lists and better looking application details pages.</p>
+    clearly indicate whether an application is Free Software. The layout of
+    many of the lists and pages has also been refined.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="wayland">
@@ -112,7 +118,6 @@
     tablets, the ability to rotate displays, and the ability to use GNOME's
     on-screen keyboard. Numerous smaller issues have also been resolved, making
     the Wayland experience even more polished.</p>
-    <!-- Add that screen rotation and the on screen keyboard are now supported -->
   </section>
 
   <section id="keyboard-settings">
@@ -122,15 +127,18 @@
     new design is much clearer and eliminates known issues with the previous
     version. A search feature makes it really quick to search for keyboard
     shortcuts you want to change, and the process for setting a shortcut
-    provides much improved feedback.</p>
+    provides much clearer feedback.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="dconf-editor">
     <title>Redesigned dconf Editor</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>Complete rework of the UI, pathbar-based. New “delay mode”, that allows
-    to apply multiple changes at once. Allows erasing keys without schemas.
-    Allows recursive reset of keys, erasing keys without schemas.</p>
+    <p>dconf Editor, the application for browsing and changing settings, has
+    had a design refresh for &gnomeversion;. The new version has a new,
+    simplified interface, based around a single path bar. A new “delay mode”
+    allows multiple changes to be made at once. Several reset options allow
+    either resetting visible settings, or recursively resetting them (for the
+    current folder and any subfolders).</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="smaller-things">