[release-notes/gnome-3-20] more.page - refine the location services section

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit 6d41bc5e2966a7c3d8249280b174d35dce74acaa
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Fri Mar 11 17:38:21 2016 +0000

    more.page - refine the location services section

 help/C/more.page |   28 ++++++++++++++++------------
 1 files changed, 16 insertions(+), 12 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/more.page b/help/C/more.page
index e3b9e29..e6ad0f8 100644
--- a/help/C/more.page
+++ b/help/C/more.page
@@ -118,18 +118,22 @@
   <section id="location-services-privacy">
     <title>Privacy Controls for Location Services</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>You'll now get better control over which application have access
-    to the location service data and not. The first time an application tries
-    to access your location, a dialog box will prompt you for permission
-    before giving access.</p>
-
-    <p>While the location service is active, an indicator will be displayed
-    in the top bar.</p>
-
-    <p>All applications that requests access to location data are listed in the
-    Privacy settings. There you can set the access for each individual
-    application. You can turn off the location services for the entire system
-    using the disable option in the system menu.</p>
+    <p>Location services makes it possible for applications to find out your
+    current location. While this can be extremely useful, it can also be a
+    privacy issue if you don't want other parties to know where you are. For
+    this reason, it has always been possible to disable location services, in
+    order to prevent them from being used by applications. With 3.20, access to
+    location services can be decided per application, making these privacy
+    controls much more flexible.</p>
+    <p>Privacy controls for location services are also much more robust in
+    3.20, since applications are now required to ask for access to location
+    data the first time they try to access it. These applications can
+    provide an explanation for why they are trying to access location data.</p>
+    <p>All the applications that have requested access to location data are
+    listed in  a new part of the privacy settings. Here you can allow or deny
+    access for each application. It is also possible to turn off location
+    services for the entire system. As with previous versions of GNOME, an
+    indicator is displayed in the top bar when location service are in use.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="nibbles">