[release-notes/gnome-3-20] refinements to the more page

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit 2eb3da947e583be62f3cf5e1e5102c382cb66221
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Fri Mar 11 16:00:13 2016 +0000

    refinements to the more page

 help/C/more.page |   34 ++++++++++++++++------------------
 1 files changed, 16 insertions(+), 18 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/more.page b/help/C/more.page
index b70eb13..3331537 100644
--- a/help/C/more.page
+++ b/help/C/more.page
@@ -29,34 +29,32 @@
   <title>Other Improvements in GNOME &gnomeversion;</title>
 
   <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; includes many other new features and improvements,
-  including improvements to Boxes and Polari, and enhancements for touchpad and
-  touchscreen users. Read on to find out more!</p>
+  including improvements to Maps, new features in Software and an improved
+  font.</p>
 
   <section id="media-controls">
     <title>Integrated Media Controls</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>With GNOME 3.20, media controls — which was previously only possible
-    with GNOME Shell extensions— are now built-in and displayed in the
-    notification/clock area. This provides a way to quickly access the controls
-    of media application (music or video) that is currently in use. It can even
-    show multiple applications at the same time.</p>
-    <p>The panel allows previous, play/pause and next options on a track, and
-    it also shows the name of the currently playing track and the artist. This
-    new feature integrates with a large range of music players, using the
+    <p>With GNOME 3.20, media controls are now built-in and displayed in the
+    notification/clock area. This provides a way to quickly access media
+    applications (music or video) that are currently in use. Controls for
+    multiple media applications can even be shown at the same time.</p>
+    <p>The controls show the name and artist of the currently playing track,
+    which can be paused and resumed. It is also possible to skip forward and
+    back. This new feature works with a large range of music players, using the
     common MPRIS standard.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="software-reviews">
     <title>Software Reviews</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>Now you can see what other users think about an application you are
-    considering installing.</p>
-    <p>Software Reviews enables you to browse for reviews, or you can write
-    your own reviews for applications you've used. Software automatically
-    prioritizes the display of most useful reviews, while star ratings are
-    shown to help you get an idea of ratings at a glance.</p>
-    <p>You can also let other users know which reviews you've found to be the
-    most useful by rating them up.</p>
+    <p>Software now lets you see what other users think about an application you are
+    considering installing, and you can share your thoughts with others by
+    writing your own reviews.</p>
+    <p>Reviews allow apps to be rated, and an average rating is shown for each
+    application, allowing you to get an idea at a glance. Software also
+    prioritizes the display of most useful reviews, and you can let other users
+    know when you've found a review to be useful by rating it up.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="cantarell">