[release-notes/gnome-3-20] refine the index page

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit 77ea479ecd684d6c0b4e84ca6f5b0ac4ba1d3e31
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Fri Mar 11 15:19:21 2016 +0000

    refine the index page

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@@ -36,21 +36,26 @@
   release incorporates &gitcommits; changes, made by approximately &gitauthors;
   contributors.</p>
 
+  <p>3.20 has been named “Delhi” in recognition of this year's GNOME.Asia
+  organising team. <link href="http://gnome.asia/";>GNOME.Asia</link> is GNOME’s
+  long-running annual conference in Asia, and is only possible due to the hard
+  work of local volunteers.</p>
+
   <section id="os-upgrades">
     <title>Operating System Upgrades</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>It has always been possible to install software updates through the
-    GNOME Software application. However, from 3.20, it is also possible to
-    upgrade to new major versions of your operating system. This is the first
-    time that GNOME has had this ability, and means that you no longer need to
-    do a new installation when the next version of your distro comes out. It is
-    a major milestone in making GNOME-based systems user friendly and
-    accessible to all.</p>
-    <p>Upgrading your operating system is simple and convenient. A notification
-    informs you when an upgrade is available, and you get to choose when the
-    upgrade is downloaded, and progress information is provided. Installation
-    of the upgrade happens while the system isn't running, in order to
-    increase saftey and prevent errors.</p>
+    Software application. However, from 3.20, it is also possible to upgrade to
+    new major versions of your operating system. This is the first time that
+    GNOME has had this ability, and means that you no longer need to do a new
+    installation or use a command line tool to get the next version of your
+    distro. It is a major milestone in making GNOME-based systems user friendly
+    and accessible to all.</p>
+    <p>Upgrading your operating system is simple and convenient. You are
+    automatically notified when an upgrade is available to be downloaded, as
+    well as when it is ready to be installed. Installation of the upgrade
+    happens while the system isn't running, in order to increase saftey and
+    prevent errors.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="wayland">
@@ -91,12 +96,12 @@
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>With 3.20, editing has arrived in Photos. The new editing controls are
     simple and easy to use, and all editing is non-destructive, so your
-    original photo is preserved, and changes can be undone. Editing functions
+    original photo is preserved and changes can be undone. Editing functions
     include crop and rotate, color adjustment and picture enhancement. A
     selection of artistic filters are also available.</p>
-    <p>Editing is accompanied by a new export feature, that allows you to
-    generate copies of edited photos and share them. An option to export at a
-    reduced size is useful for uploads and emailing.</p>
+    <p>Editing is accompanied by a new export feature that allows you to
+    generate copies of edited photos for sharing, printing or backup. An option
+    to export at a reduced size is useful for uploads and emailing.</p>
     <p>The latest Photos release also includes a collection of smaller bug
     fixes and improvements.</p>
   </section>
@@ -106,45 +111,52 @@
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>3.20 has been a big release for Polari, GNOME's IRC application. The
     online paste service feature that was introduced last release has been
-    substantially improved. In addition to being able to paste blocks of text
-    for sharing, it is now possible to paste images directly into chats, where
-    they are shared using <link href="http://imgur.com/";>Imgur</link>. In
-    addition, paste links no longer have to be separate chat posts.</p>
-    <p>Adding servers and rooms has also been improved for 3.20. Adding a
-    server is now just a matter of picking the one you want from a list, rather
-    than having to enter the address manually. This is not only easier, but also
-    ensures that the most secure connection is automatically selected.</p>
-    <p>In 3.20, server properties are now accessed from the sidebar, which is
-    more convenient and natural, and server passwords can now be used (this is
-    especially useful when using
-    <link href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/BNC_(software)">bouncers</link>,
-    like <link href="http://wiki.znc.in/ZNC";>ZNC</link>).</p>
+    substantially improved: in addition to being able to paste blocks of text
+    for sharing, it is now possible to paste images directly into chats, in
+    order to share them using <link href="http://imgur.com/";>Imgur</link>.</p>
+    <p>Adding servers and rooms has also been improved for 3.20, as have server
+    settings. Adding a server is now just a matter of picking the one you want
+    from a list, rather than having to enter the address manually. This is not
+    only easier, but also ensures that the most secure connection is
+    automatically selected. Also in 3.20, server properties are now accessed
+    from the sidebar, which is more convenient and natural. These changes were
+    implemented by Isabella Ribeiro, as a part of an
+    <link href="https://www.gnome.org/outreachy/";>Outreachy</link> internship.
+    </p>
     <p>The new version of Polari also supports many more traditional IRC
     features, like the /msg command, tab completion for IRC commands, and the
     ability to open IRC links.</p>
-    <p>In addition to these features, 3.20 includes a lot of smaller changes,
-    such as improved visuals and animations, smarter handling of status
-    messages in order to minimize noise in chatrooms, and additonal keyboard
-    shortcuts (see Polari's shortcut window for an overview).</p>
+    <p>In addition to these features, 3.20 includes some significant smaller
+    changes:</p>
+    <list>
+      <item><p>Polari can now handle server passwords (this is  especially
+      useful when using
+      <link href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/BNC_(software)">bouncers
+      </link>, like <link href="http://wiki.znc.in/ZNC";>ZNC</link>).</p></item>
+      <item><p>Look and feel has been improved, with a restyled input bar and
+      new text animations.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Status message handling is smarter, in order to minimize noise
+      in chatrooms.</p></item>
+      <item><p>More keyboard shortcuts have been added (see Polari's shortcut
+      window for an overview).</p></item>
+    </list>
   </section>
 
   <section id="files">
     <title>Files</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>The Files application has had a lot of polish and refinement for 3.20.
-    Search has been a particular focus: the new version includes an updated
-    search filters interface, which allows filtering search results by when
-    files were changed or edited last, or by type of file. It is vastly simpler
-    and easier to use than the previous version. Search has also been made more
-    robust: performance issues have been addressed, and the interface is faster
-    and more responsive.</p>
-    <p>Files also has a more compact, easier to understand preferences dialog
-    for 3.20. This includes additional settings for showing the permanent
+    Search has been a particular focus: search filters have been revamped, and
+    are vastly simpler and easier to use than the previous version. Search has
+    also been made more robust: performance issues have been addressed, and the
+    interface is faster and more responsive.</p>
+    <p>Files also has a more compact and easier to understand preferences
+    dialog for 3.20. This includes new settings for showing the permanent
     delete and create symbolic link actions, as well as for recursive search
     behavior.</p>
-    <p>Smaller improvements include an extra zoom level in the list and grid
-    views, bigger thumbnails, and the display of available and remaining space
-    for drives in the other places view.</p>
+    <p>Smaller improvements in 3.20 include an extra zoom level in the list and
+    grid views, bigger thumbnails, and the display of available and remaining
+    space for drives in the other places view.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="more">