[release-notes/gnome-3-20] start tweaking

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit 6b7611b4cf86ddb4ab484f4c96a718581a8e02e9
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Fri Mar 11 10:54:02 2016 +0000

    start tweaking

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 1 files changed, 19 insertions(+), 17 deletions(-)
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   <section id="os-upgrades">
     <title>Operating System Upgrades</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>It has always been possible to update your system to minor versions
-    using Software. With 3.20, it is also possible to upgrade major versions.
-    This is the first time that GNOME has had this ability, and means that you
-    no longer need to do a new installation when the next version of your
-    distro comes out. This new feature is a major milestone in making
-    GNOME-based systems user friendly and accessible to all.</p>
-    <p>Upgrading your operating system is made as simple and as easy as
-    possible. A notification informs you when an upgrade is available, and
-    Software provides information about what the new upgrade. You get to choose
-    when the upgrade is downloaded, and progress information is provided.</p>
+    <p>It has always been possible to install software updates through the
+    GNOME Software application. However, from 3.20, it is also possible to
+    upgrade to new major versions of your operating system. This is the first
+    time that GNOME has had this ability, and means that you no longer need to
+    do a new installation when the next version of your distro comes out. It is
+    a major milestone in making GNOME-based systems user friendly and
+    accessible to all.</p>
+    <p>Upgrading your operating system is simple and convenient. A notification
+    informs you when an upgrade is available, and you get to choose when the
+    upgrade is downloaded, and progress information is provided. Installation
+    of the upgrade happens while the system isn't running, in order to
+    increase saftey and prevent errors.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="wayland">
-    <title>Wayland Ready</title>
+    <title>Wayland is Available</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/wayland.png"/>
     <p>Wayland is the next generation technology for display and input on
     GNU/Linux. It eliminates graphics glitches and long-standing bugs, and lays
     the foundation for more secure applications. Wayland is also enables new
     features, like multitouch touchpad gestures.</p>
-    <p>Work on making GNOME usable with Wayland has been going on for some
+    <p>Work on making GNOME usable with Wayland has been happening for some
     time, and a huge amount of effort has gone into this initiative for 3.20.
     Features that have been completed for 3.20 include kinetic scrolling,
     drag-and-drop, application startup notifications, middle-click paste and
-    more. For the majority of users, Wayland now provides a completely usable
-    day to day experience. To try it out, select GNOME on Wayland from the gear
-    menu on the login screen.</p>
-    <p>Features that are still currently missing from GNOME on Wayland includes
-    screen sharing and support Wacom graphics tablets.</p>
+    more. This work means that, for the majority of users, Wayland now provides
+    a usable day to day experience. To try it out, select GNOME on Wayland from
+    the gear menu on the login screen.</p>
+    <p>Note: some features are unavailable when running GNOME with Wayland,
+    including screen sharing and support for Wacom graphics tablets.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="shortcuts-windows">