[release-notes/gnome-3-18] refine the developers page

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit c79ec4f792365561e8d400e0c4a5d4df7c986950
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Tue Sep 15 14:20:59 2015 +0100

    refine the developers page

 help/C/developers.page |   12 ++++++------
 1 files changed, 6 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/developers.page b/help/C/developers.page
index 96b627a..9ab16a6 100644
--- a/help/C/developers.page
+++ b/help/C/developers.page
@@ -23,13 +23,13 @@
 
   <title>What’s new for developers, system administrators and distributors</title>
 
-  <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; introduces a number of new features and enhancements for those working with GNOME 
technologies.</p>
+  <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; includes many new features and improvements for those working with GNOME 
technologies. Here are some of them.</p>
 
   <section id="builder">
     <title>Builder</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>Builder is the new integrated development environment for GNOME, which aims to make it quick and easy 
to do all kinds of development work, particularly application development. Thanks to a successful 
crowdfunding campaign, a huge amount of progress has been made since last release. While it is still under 
heavy development, Builder is already becoming an extremely effective tool.</p>
-    <p>A new workspace system has been introduced, which allows different panels to be viewed. Current 
panels include a file browser, build target list, searchable list of symbols for the current file, searchable 
documentation index, a terminal, and CPU performance graph.</p>
+    <p>A new workspace system has been introduced for &gnomeversion;, which allows different panels to be 
added and removed. Current panels include a file browser, build target list, searchable list of symbols for 
the current file, searchable documentation index, a terminal, and CPU performance graph.</p>
     <p>Other improvements in &gnomeversion; include:</p>
     <list>
       <item><p>Code autocompletion is now more accurate.</p></item>
@@ -44,9 +44,9 @@
   <section id="gtk+">
     <title>GTK+</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>GTK+, the GNOME toolkit, introduces various improvements in &gnomeversion;:</p>
+    <p>There are a number of improvements to GTK+ in &gnomeversion;:</p>
     <list>
-      <item><p>A new tool called <code>gtk-builder-tool</code> allows GtkBuilder UI files to be validated 
and simplified.</p></item>
+      <item><p>A new tool, called <code>gtk-builder-tool</code> allows GtkBuilder UI files to be validated 
and simplified.</p></item>
       <item><p>&gnomeversion; includes a raft of new typographic features, including colored underlines, 
letterspacing, font features and translucent font colors. It also includes support for custom font maps and 
font options. These features can be accessed using <link 
href="https://developer.gnome.org/pango/stable/PangoMarkupFormat.html";>Pango markup</link>.</p></item>
       <item><p>Output-only windows are now supported, using the <code>GtkOverlay::pass-through</code> 
property. This allows input to be directed to the correct window, and is useful when using floating 
information or decorative overlays.</p></item>
       <item><p><code>GtkGesture</code> now has built-in support for touchpad gestures (only available on 
Wayland).</p></item>
@@ -86,13 +86,13 @@
     <list>
       <item><p>Threadpools are no longer limited to 10 threads.</p></item>
       <item><p>Information about metered networks is now available in 
<code>GNetworkMonitor</code>.</p></item>
-      <item><p>Portability improvements: GNotification implemented on OS X and GAppInfo registry-based 
implementation on Windows.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Portability improvements: <code>GNotification</code> has now been implemented on OS X, and a 
<code>GAppInfo</code> implementation has been added to Windows (this is registry-based).</p></item>
     </list>
   </section>
 
   <section id="clutter">
     <title>Clutter</title>
-    <p>Changes in Clutter for &gnomeversion;:</p>
+    <p>Clutter has a number of improvements in &gnomeversion;:</p>
     <list>
       <item><p>Clutter now prefers OpenGL 3.x contexts, if they are available. Otherwise, it will fall back 
to the old legacy OpenGL API.</p></item>
       <item><p>Touchpad gesture events are now supported with the <code>libinput</code> backend; this can be 
used by Clutter-based Wayland compositors, like GNOME Shell.</p></item>