[release-notes/gnome-3-12] refine the index page

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit 55144b17e640babfd71aebdb7c1ddee5084a6749
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Mon Mar 17 10:11:29 2014 +0000

    refine the index page

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@@ -26,15 +26,13 @@
 
   <title>Welcome to GNOME &gnomeversion;</title>
 
-  <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; is the latest release of GNOME, and is the result of six months hard work by the 
GNOME project. It includes new features and a large number of smaller improvements and enhancements. 
&gnomeversion; contains &gitcommits; changes by approximately &gitauthors; contributors. It is the best GNOME 
3 release to date.</p>
-
-  <p>New features and improvements being introduced in GNOME &gnomeversion; include:</p>
+  <p>&gnomeversion; is the latest GNOME release, and is the result of six month's work by the GNOME project. 
It includes new features and a large number of smaller improvements and enhancements. The release contains 
&gitcommits; changes by approximately &gitauthors; contributors. New features and improvements being 
introduced in GNOME &gnomeversion; include:</p>
 
   <section id="videos">
-    <title>Videos</title>
+    <title>Videos </title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>GNOME 3.12 includes a reimagined <app>Videos</app> application. Modern in style, the new version 
allows you to browse videos that are on your computer, as well as surf online video channels. Channels in 
this release include <link href="http://www.rai.tv/";>Rai.tv</link>, <link 
href="http://www.theguardian.com/video";>The Guardian Videos</link> channel, <link 
href="http://blip.tv/";>Blip.tv</link> and <link href="http://trailers.apple.com/trailers/";>Apple Movie 
Trailers</link>. Developers can easily add new video channels, and we expect the list of channels to grow in 
the future. Additionally, integration with the popular <link href="https://getpocket.com/";>Pocket</link> 
service provides an easy way to watch videos that you have saved for later.</p>
-    <p>The new look <app>Videos</app> app also includes a redesigned playback view. This provides a more 
streamlined than the previous version: floating playback controls hide when you don't need them, so that 
nothing gets in the way of your viewing, and the fullscreen playback view also has a new more refined 
look.</p>
+    <p>GNOME 3.12 includes a reimagined <app>Videos</app> application. Modern in style, the new version 
allows you to browse videos that are on your computer, as well as surf online video channels. Channels in 
this release include <link href="http://www.rai.tv/";>Rai.tv</link>, <link 
href="http://www.theguardian.com/video";>The Guardian Videos</link> channel, <link 
href="http://blip.tv/";>Blip.tv</link> and <link href="http://trailers.apple.com/trailers/";>Apple Movie 
Trailers</link>. Developers can easily add their own video channels, and we expect the list of channels to 
grow in the future. Additionally, integration with the popular <link 
href="https://getpocket.com/";>Pocket</link> service provides an easy way to watch videos that you have saved 
for later.</p>
+    <p>The new look <app>Videos</app> app also includes a redesigned playback view. This provides a more 
streamlined experience than the previous version: floating playback controls hide when you don't need them, 
so that nothing gets in the way of your viewing, and the fullscreen playback view also has a new more refined 
look.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="software">
@@ -42,31 +40,32 @@
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
     <p>GNOME's new <app>Software</app> application was first introduced six months ago, in version 
&lastversion;. Since then it has grown up in a serious way. Performance has been improved across the board, 
so that common operations like browsing, searching and installing are fast and responsive. The new version 
also includes a long list of new features, including:</p>
     <list>
-      <item><p>Screenshots of applications you might want to install. Most applications now have these, are 
new screenshots are being added every day.</p></item>
-      <item><p>An automatic system which gives personalized star ratings for each application.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Screenshots of applications, to make it easier to decide if you want to install them. Most 
applications now have screenshots, are new screenshots are being added every day.</p></item>
+      <item><p>An automatic system that rates each application for you.</p></item>
       <item><p>The ability to install individual software packages, such as those that you have 
downloaded.</p></item>
       <item><p>Packages containing software repositories can be installed, and you can now review and remove 
third party repositories that are in use.</p></item>
     </list>
-    <p>Checking for and installing software updates experience has also been improved for &gnomeversion;. It 
is now possible to choose to have your computer power off after updates have been installed, and you can 
install updates from the system power off button. <app>Software</app> also indicates when the last update 
check was performed, and allows you to manually check for updates.</p>
+    <p>Checking for and installing software updates has also been improved for &gnomeversion;. It is now 
possible to choose to have your computer power off after updates have been installed, and you can also 
install updates from the system power off button. <app>Software</app> also indicates when the last update 
check was performed, and allows you to manually check for updates.</p>
+    <p>With all these updates, Software has become a capable, all-round solution for managing the 
applications on your system.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="rounding-out">
     <title>Rounding Things Out</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>For &gnomeversion; we have worked with our users to round out the GNOME 3 experience. An emphasis on 
filling in requested functionality has resulted in a number of changes, including the addition of wired 
networking to the system status area and the addition of user-configurable application folders. Many of the 
improvements to the software updates experience have also come about through dialog with users.</p>
-    <p>This release also includes many smaller changes that result in a much more polished, high quality 
experience. Dialogs are now displayed in the <gui>Activities Overview</gui>. The visual theme and icons have 
had many small updates, animations have been refined so they are more subtle and informative, and tabs and 
many dialogs have been restyled to give them a consistent and more beautiful appearance. &gnomeversion; also 
contains a number of performance improvements, including faster startup times and lower memory usage.</p>
+    <p>For &gnomeversion; we have worked with our users to round out the GNOME 3 experience. An emphasis on 
filling in requested functionality has resulted in a number of changes, including the addition of wired 
networking to the system status area and the creation of user-configurable application folders. Many of the 
improvements to the software updates experience have also come about through dialog with users.</p>
+    <p>This release also includes many smaller changes that result in a much more polished, high-quality 
experience. Dialogs are now displayed in the <gui>Activities Overview</gui>. The visual theme and icons have 
had many small updates, animations have been refined so they are more subtle and informative, and tabs and 
many dialogs have been restyled to give them a consistent and more beautiful appearance. &gnomeversion; also 
contains a number of performance improvements, including faster startup times and lower memory usage.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="hi-res-displays">
     <title>Improved High Resolution Display Support</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png" />
-    <p>High resolution display support was first introduced in &lastversion;. This provided high-resolution 
display support for much GNOME 3, and for &gnomeversion; this work has continued. Since then, high-resolution 
display support has been extended to include all they key aspects of the core GNOME 3 experience, including 
the Activities Overview, top bar, lock screen and system dialogs.</p>
+    <p>High resolution display support was first introduced in &lastversion;. This provided high-resolution 
display support for much GNOME 3. Since then, high-resolution display support has been extended to include 
all they key aspects of the core GNOME 3 experience, including the <gui>Activities Overview</gui>, top bar, 
lock screen and system dialogs.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="app-folders">
     <title>Create Your Own Application Folders</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>Application folders are a new way to organize your applications in the <gui>Activities 
Overview</gui>, making it possible for you to personalize your setup, and find the applications that you are 
interested in. GNOME 3 has included several automatic application folders in the past, which contain 
<gui>Utilities</gui> and <gui>Sundry</gui> items. From &gnomeversion;, it is possible to create your own. 
Controls for this can be found in the <app>Software</app> application: simply go to the <gui>Installed</gui> 
view, select some applications, and choose which folder you want them to belong to.</p>
+    <p>Application folders are a new way to organize your applications in GNOME 3. They make it possible for 
you to personalize your setup and make it easier to find the applications that you are interested in. GNOME 3 
has included several automatic application folders in the past, which contain <gui>Utilities</gui> and 
<gui>Sundry</gui> items. With &gnomeversion;, it is now possible to create your own folders in the 
<gui>Activities Overview</gui>. Controls for this can be found in the <app>Software</app> application: simply 
go to the <gui>Installed</gui> view, select some applications, and choose which folder you want them to 
belong to.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="more">