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[release-notes/gnome-3-12] iterate on the text

commit ce35ae4676c53413c59cd6216e71baa6aad96056
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Mon Mar 17 09:24:42 2014 +0000

    iterate on the text

 help/C/i18n.page         |    4 ++--
 help/C/index.page        |   24 ++++++++++++------------
 help/C/more-apps.page    |   10 +++++-----
 help/C/more-core-ux.page |   27 ++++++++++++---------------
 4 files changed, 31 insertions(+), 34 deletions(-)
---
diff --git a/help/C/i18n.page b/help/C/i18n.page
index 50eacbe..d262569 100644
--- a/help/C/i18n.page
+++ b/help/C/i18n.page
@@ -11,7 +11,7 @@
 
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="index#more" group="third"/>
-    <desc>Learn about the different languages in which GNOME 3.12 is available</desc>
+    <desc>Learn about the different languages in which GNOME 3.10 is available</desc>
     <credit type="author">
       <name its:translate="no">Allan Day</name>
       <email its:translate="no">allanday gnome org</email>
@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@
 
   <title>Internationalization</title>
 
-  <p>Thanks to members of the worldwide <link href="https://live.gnome.org/TranslationProject";>GNOME 
Translation Project</link>, GNOME 3.12 offers support for more than &supportedlanguages; languages with at 
least &percentagetranslated; percent of strings translated. User documentation is also available in many 
languages.</p>
+  <p>Thanks to members of the worldwide <link href="https://live.gnome.org/TranslationProject";>GNOME 
Translation Project</link>, GNOME 3.10 offers support for more than &supportedlanguages; languages with at 
least &percentagetranslated; percent of strings translated. User documentation is also available in many 
languages.</p>
 
   <list style="compact">
    <item><p>Arabic</p></item>
diff --git a/help/C/index.page b/help/C/index.page
index 51b7456..8ca2fcf 100644
--- a/help/C/index.page
+++ b/help/C/index.page
@@ -26,51 +26,51 @@
 
   <title>Welcome to GNOME &gnomeversion;</title>
 
-  <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; is the latest release of GNOME 3, and is the result of six months of hard work by 
the GNOME project. &gnomeversion; contains &gitcommits; changes by approximately &gitauthors; contributors 
and includes a number of new features alongside many smaller improvements and enhancements. It is the best 
quality GNOME 3 release to date.</p>
+  <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; is the latest release of GNOME, and is the result of six months hard work by the 
GNOME project. It includes new features and a large number of smaller improvements and enhancements. 
&gnomeversion; contains &gitcommits; changes by approximately &gitauthors; contributors. It is the best GNOME 
3 release to date.</p>
 
   <p>New features and improvements being introduced in GNOME &gnomeversion; include:</p>
 
   <section id="videos">
     <title>Videos</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>GNOME 3.12 includes a reimagined <app>Videos</app> application. Modern in style, the new version 
allows you to browse videos that are on your computer, as well as surf online video channels, including <link 
href="http://www.rai.tv/";>Rai.tv</link>, <link href="http://www.theguardian.com/video";>The Guardian 
Videos</link> channel, <link href="http://blip.tv/";>Blip.tv</link> and <link 
href="http://trailers.apple.com/trailers/";>Apple Movie Trailers</link>. Developers can easily add new video 
channels, and we expect the list of channels you can surf to grow in the future. Additionally, integration 
with the popular Pocket service allows you to access Videos that you have saved to watch later.</p>
-    <p>The new look <app>Videos</app> app also includes a redesigned playback view. This is much more 
streamlined than the previous version: floating playback controls hide when you don't need them, so that 
nothing gets in the way of your viewing, and the fullscreen playback view also has a new more refined 
look.</p>
+    <p>GNOME 3.12 includes a reimagined <app>Videos</app> application. Modern in style, the new version 
allows you to browse videos that are on your computer, as well as surf online video channels. Channels in 
this release include <link href="http://www.rai.tv/";>Rai.tv</link>, <link 
href="http://www.theguardian.com/video";>The Guardian Videos</link> channel, <link 
href="http://blip.tv/";>Blip.tv</link> and <link href="http://trailers.apple.com/trailers/";>Apple Movie 
Trailers</link>. Developers can easily add new video channels, and we expect the list of channels to grow in 
the future. Additionally, integration with the popular <link href="https://getpocket.com/";>Pocket</link> 
service provides an easy way to watch videos that you have saved for later.</p>
+    <p>The new look <app>Videos</app> app also includes a redesigned playback view. This provides a more 
streamlined than the previous version: floating playback controls hide when you don't need them, so that 
nothing gets in the way of your viewing, and the fullscreen playback view also has a new more refined 
look.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="software">
     <title>Software Has Grown Up</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>GNOME's new <app>Software</app> application was first introduced six months ago, in version 
&lastversion;. Since then it has grown up in a serious way. Performance has been improved across the board, 
so that common operations like browsing and searching for applications or installing and removing software 
are fast and responsive. The new version also includes a long list of new features, including:</p>
+    <p>GNOME's new <app>Software</app> application was first introduced six months ago, in version 
&lastversion;. Since then it has grown up in a serious way. Performance has been improved across the board, 
so that common operations like browsing, searching and installing are fast and responsive. The new version 
also includes a long list of new features, including:</p>
     <list>
-      <item><p>Screenshots of most applications, with new screenshots being added every day.</p></item>
-      <item><p>An automatic system which gives personalized star ratings for each application</p></item>
+      <item><p>Screenshots of applications you might want to install. Most applications now have these, are 
new screenshots are being added every day.</p></item>
+      <item><p>An automatic system which gives personalized star ratings for each application.</p></item>
       <item><p>The ability to install individual software packages, such as those that you have 
downloaded.</p></item>
       <item><p>Packages containing software repositories can be installed, and you can now review and remove 
third party repositories that are in use.</p></item>
     </list>
-    <p>The software updates experience has also received a number of enhancements to make it more convenient 
to use. It is now possible to manually check for updates and see when the last automatic update check was 
performed. You can also opt to have your computer power off after updates have been installed, and you can 
install updates from the system power off button.</p>
+    <p>Checking for and installing software updates experience has also been improved for &gnomeversion;. It 
is now possible to choose to have your computer power off after updates have been installed, and you can 
install updates from the system power off button. <app>Software</app> also indicates when the last update 
check was performed, and allows you to manually check for updates.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="rounding-out">
     <title>Rounding Things Out</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>For 3.12 we have worked with our users to round out the GNOME 3 experience. An emphasis on filling in 
requested functionality has resulted in a number of changes, including the addition of wired networking to 
the system status area and menu and the addition of user-configurable application folders. Many of the 
improvements to the software updates experience have also come about through dialog with users.</p>
-    <p>This release also includes many smaller changes that result in a much more polished, high quality 
experience. The visual theme and icons have had a number of subtle changes, animations have been refined so 
they are more subtle and informative, and tabs and many dialogs have been restyled to give them a consistent 
and more beautiful appearance. &gnomeversion; also contains a number of performance improvements, including 
faster startup times and lower memory usage.</p>
+    <p>For &gnomeversion; we have worked with our users to round out the GNOME 3 experience. An emphasis on 
filling in requested functionality has resulted in a number of changes, including the addition of wired 
networking to the system status area and the addition of user-configurable application folders. Many of the 
improvements to the software updates experience have also come about through dialog with users.</p>
+    <p>This release also includes many smaller changes that result in a much more polished, high quality 
experience. Dialogs are now displayed in the <gui>Activities Overview</gui>. The visual theme and icons have 
had many small updates, animations have been refined so they are more subtle and informative, and tabs and 
many dialogs have been restyled to give them a consistent and more beautiful appearance. &gnomeversion; also 
contains a number of performance improvements, including faster startup times and lower memory usage.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="hi-res-displays">
     <title>Improved High Resolution Display Support</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png" />
-    <p>High resolution display support was first introduced the last GNOME release, version &lastversion;. 
This provided high resolution display support for much GNOME 3, and for &gnomeversion; this work has 
continued. Since then, high resolution display support has been extended to include all they key aspects of 
the core GNOME 3 experience, including the Activities Overview, top bar, lock screen and system dialogs.</p>
+    <p>High resolution display support was first introduced in &lastversion;. This provided high-resolution 
display support for much GNOME 3, and for &gnomeversion; this work has continued. Since then, high-resolution 
display support has been extended to include all they key aspects of the core GNOME 3 experience, including 
the Activities Overview, top bar, lock screen and system dialogs.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="app-folders">
     <title>Create Your Own Application Folders</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>Application folders can be found in the Activities Overview. GNOME 3 has included several automatic 
application folders in the past, which contain <gui>Utilities</gui> and <gui>Sundry</gui> items. From 
&gnomeversion;, it is possible to create your own folders, as well as move applications from the automatic 
folders to ones of your choosing. These folder management features can be found in the <app>Software</app> 
application: simply go to the <gui>Installed</gui> view, select some applications, and choose which folder 
you want them to belong to.</p>
+    <p>Application folders are a new way to organize your applications in the <gui>Activities 
Overview</gui>, making it possible for you to personalize your setup, and find the applications that you are 
interested in. GNOME 3 has included several automatic application folders in the past, which contain 
<gui>Utilities</gui> and <gui>Sundry</gui> items. From &gnomeversion;, it is possible to create your own. 
Controls for this can be found in the <app>Software</app> application: simply go to the <gui>Installed</gui> 
view, select some applications, and choose which folder you want them to belong to.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="more">
-    <title>And That's Not All</title>
+    <title>And that's not all</title>
     <p>There's much more to GNOME &gnomeversion;. Read on to find out...</p>
     <links type="topic" groups="first second third fourth"/>
   </section>
diff --git a/help/C/more-apps.page b/help/C/more-apps.page
index b76e634..a48a010 100644
--- a/help/C/more-apps.page
+++ b/help/C/more-apps.page
@@ -1,8 +1,8 @@
 <?xml version="1.0" encoding="UTF-8"?>
        <!DOCTYPE page [
-<!ENTITY gnomeversion "3.12">
-<!ENTITY lastversion "3.10">
-<!ENTITY nextversion "3.14">
+<!ENTITY gnomeversion "3.10">
+<!ENTITY lastversion "3.8">
+<!ENTITY nextversion "3.12">
        ]>
 <page xmlns="http://projectmallard.org/1.0/";
       xmlns:its="http://www.w3.org/2005/11/its";
@@ -12,7 +12,7 @@
 
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="index#more" group="second"/>
-    <desc>Learn about the improvements to GNOME's applications for 3.12</desc>
+    <desc>Learn about the improvements to GNOME's applications for 3.10</desc>
     <credit type="author">
       <name its:translate="no">Allan Day</name>
       <email its:translate="no">allanday gnome org</email>
@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@
   <section id="web">
     <title>Upgrade Your Web</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p><app>Web</app>, the GNOME web browser, also features a long list of interface improvements for 3.12. 
It has a new address bar design, which keeps the header bar clean and informative, a new style for incognito 
windows, better downloading behavior, an updated Most Visited page (which lets you jump to the sites you 
visit most often), redesigned cookies and passwords dialogs and nicer error pages.</p>
+    <p><app>Web</app>, the GNOME web browser, also features a long list of interface improvements for 3.12. 
It has a new address bar design, which keeps the header bar clean and informative, a new style for incognito 
windows, better downloading behaviour, an updated Most Visited page (which let's you jump to the sites you 
visit most often), redesigned cookies and passwords dialogs and nicer error pages.</p>
     <p>The new version also includes a number of significant performance improvements, including faster 
start up times, and improvements to page loading times.</p>
   </section>
 
diff --git a/help/C/more-core-ux.page b/help/C/more-core-ux.page
index 66a7cd7..51d55b1 100644
--- a/help/C/more-core-ux.page
+++ b/help/C/more-core-ux.page
@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
 
   <info>
     <link type="guide" xref="index#more" group="first"/>
-    <desc>GNOME 3.12 is packed with other new features and enhancements</desc>
+    <desc>GNOME 3.10 is packed with other new features and enhancements</desc>
     <credit type="author">
       <name its:translate="no">Allan Day</name>
       <email its:translate="no">allanday gnome org</email>
@@ -23,19 +23,14 @@
   <section id="geolocation">
     <title>Upgraded Geolocation</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>GNOME's new geolocation framework was first introduced last release, in version 3.10. Since then it 
has received a number of updates. Three new means of determining location have been introduced:</p>
-    <list>
-      <item><p>If you are using mobile broadband, the location of the cell tower you are connected 
to.</p></item>
-      <item><p>GPS, if you have a 3G modem that incorporates it.</p></item>
-      <item><p>Nearby Wi-Fi access points. This uses the <link 
href="https://location.services.mozilla.com/";>Mozilla Location Service</link>, and you can help to improve 
the accuracy of this by using the MozStumbler Android app on your phone.</p></item>
-    </list>
-    <p>Feedback about when location services are being used and controls for turning them on and off have 
also been introduced for 3.12. If an application is accessing your location, an icon is displayed in the top 
bar. The system status menu also includes controls to disable these services. More detailed privacy controls 
are planned for the future.</p>
+    <p>GNOME's new geolocation framework was first introduced six months ago, in version 3.10. Since then it 
has received a number of updates. New methods of determining location include mobile broadband cell towers, 
GPS (if you have a 3G modem with GPS built-in), and nearby Wi-Fi access points. This means that positioning 
is more accurate. Wi-Fi positioning utilizes the <link href="https://location.services.mozilla.com/";>Mozilla 
Location Service</link>, which means that you can help to improve accuracy with the MozStumbler Android app 
on your phone.</p>
+    <p>An icon is now displayed in the top bar when an application is using location services. Controls for 
turning geolocation on and off have also been added to the system status menu. More detailed privacy controls 
are planned for the future.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="cloud-integration">
     <title>Extended Cloud Integration</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>The drive to integrate GNOME 3 with cloud services continues in this release. One major new feature 
for 3.12 is the introduction of <link href="http://www.google.co.uk/cloudprint/learn/";>Google Cloud 
Print</link> integration. This allows you to print from GNOME to printers that are using the Google Cloud 
Print service, as well as to add documents to Google Drive. These options can be found in the standard GNOME 
print dialog, and are available when a Google account has been set up in <gui>Online Accounts</gui>. Other 
additions to cloud integration include:</p>
+    <p>The drive to integrate GNOME 3 with cloud services continues in 3.12. One major new feature for this 
release is the introduction of <link href="http://www.google.co.uk/cloudprint/learn/";>Google Cloud 
Print</link> integration. This allows you to print from GNOME to printers that are using the Google Cloud 
Print service, as well as to add documents to <link href="http://drive.google.com/";>Google Drive</link>. 
These options can be found in the standard GNOME print dialog, and are available when a Google account has 
been set up in <gui>Online Accounts</gui>. Other additions to cloud integration for 3.12 include:</p>
     <list>
       <item><p><link hre="http://getpocket.com/a/";>Pocket</link> integration has been added to 
<app>Videos</app>, meaning that you can watch videos stored in your <app>Pocket</app> account with the GNOME 
video player.</p></item>
       <item><p><app>Photos</app> now features <app>Facebook</app> integration, so that you can browse your 
Facebook photos alongside other photo sources.</p></item>
@@ -46,32 +41,34 @@
   <section id="initial-setup">
     <title>Revamped Initial Setup Assistant</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>GNOME's initial setup assistant, which helps people set up their system or new user accounts, has had 
a facelift for 3.12. Based on usability research funded by the <link href="https://01.org/";>Intel Open Source 
Technology Center</link>, every step of the initial setup process has been updated to make it easier and 
friendlier to use.</p>
+    <p>GNOME's initial setup assistant, which helps people set up their system or new user accounts, has had 
a facelift for 3.12. Based on usability research funded by the <link href="https://01.org/";>Intel Open Source 
Technology Center</link>, every step of the initial setup process has been updated to make it easier and 
friendlier to use. Improvements include separate steps for selecting a language and region, a larger map for 
selecting a time zone, the ability to select an avatar for your user, and improved graphics throughout.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="wayland">
     <title>Wayland</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/wayland.png" style="floatright" />
-    <p><app>Wayland</app> is the next generation technology for display and input on Linux. It promises to 
deliver smoother graphics, with improved animations and transitions. <app>Wayland</app>'s modern architecture 
will provide greater flexibility for developers, and will enable more secure sandboxed applications. 3.12 
introduces experimental <app>Wayland</app> support, which allows GNOME as well as GNOME applications to be 
run using <app>Wayland</app>. This is an important milestone on the road to full <app>Wayland</app> adoption, 
and will let developers test their software with <app>Wayland</app>. More details can be found in the <link 
type="topic" xref="developers#wayland">developer notes</link>.</p>
+    <p><app>Wayland</app> is the next generation technology for display and input on Linux. Initial 
experimental <app>Wayland</app> support was introduced last release. Since then, a huge amount of progress 
has been made towards full <app>Wayland</app> adoption, which will deliver improved graphics, important bug 
fixes, and will lay the basis for more secure applications.</p>
+    <p>Progress towards <app>Wayland</app> in the last six months includes x, y and z. If you are a 
developer or early adopter, you can test this work: see the <link type="topic" 
xref="developers#wayland">developer notes</link> for more details. Continued progress on the road to 
<app>Wayland</app> is planned for the next GNOME release.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="popovers">
     <title>Popovers</title>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
-    <p>GNOME 3.12 introduces a new interface element, called popovers. Popovers are similar to menus, but 
are far more flexible and can contain a variety of different controls. They allow more effective interface 
designs for many common types of interface and enable developers to create imaginative design solutions. 
Popovers are being used in a number of places in the new version of GNOME, and they will become increasingly 
common in future versions.</p>
+    <p>GNOME 3.12 introduces a new interface element, called popovers. These overlaid bubbles are highly 
flexible and allow effective interface designs for many common tasks. The also lend themselves to imaginative 
and engaging design solutions. Popovers are used in a number of places in the new version of GNOME, and will 
become increasingly common in future versions.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="core-ux-other">
     <title>Other Improvements</title>
-    <p>There are many other smaller enhancements to the core user experience for 3.12. These include:</p>
+    <p>There are many other smaller enhancements to the core user experience for 3.10. These include:</p>
     <list>
-      <item><p>Updated symbolic icon theme.</p></item>
-      <item><p>Visual theme refinements.</p></item>
+      <item><p>An updated symbolic icon theme.</p></item>
+      <item><p>Visual theme refinements, including subtle separators by window close buttons, improved 
backgrounds for pressed buttons, .</p></item>
       <item><p>New tab style.</p></item>
       <item><p>Faster startup times.</p></item>
       <item><p>Smoother transitions in the applications view.</p></item>
       <item><p>Revamped Bluetooth panel.</p></item>
       <item><p>Improved keyboard navigation in the Activities Overview.</p></item>
+      <item><p>A new default wallpaper, which changes over the course of the day.</p></item>
     </list>
   </section>
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