[gnome-clocks/wip/mallard-help: 52/68] Review the index help page

[Ekaterina Gerasimova <egerasimov src gnome org>]

commit 15c82fbf7dfb1a8abf278374390cc2aade7c767a
Author: Ekaterina Gerasimova <kittykat3756 gmail com>
Date:   Sun Sep 15 19:56:44 2013 +0100

    Review the index help page
    
    Make the prose more active, try to give it a two-column style.

 help/C/index.page |   41 ++++++++++++++++++++---------------------
 1 files changed, 20 insertions(+), 21 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/index.page b/help/C/index.page
index 448a311..1988d5a 100644
--- a/help/C/index.page
+++ b/help/C/index.page
@@ -1,10 +1,10 @@
 <page xmlns="http://projectmallard.org/1.0/";
       xmlns:its="http://www.w3.org/2005/11/its";
-      type="guide" style="task"
+      type="guide" style="2column task"
       id="index">
 
   <info>
-    <revision pkgversion="3.9" date="2013-09-02" status="review"/>
+    <revision pkgversion="3.10" date="2013-09-15" status="candidate"/>
 
     <include href="legal.xml" xmlns="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude"/>
 
@@ -13,49 +13,48 @@
       <email its:translate="no">aruna evam gmail com</email>
       <years>2013</years>
     </credit>
+    <credit type="editor copyright">
+      <name>Ekaterina Gerasimova</name>
+      <email>kittykat3756 gmail com</email>
+      <years>2013</years>
+    </credit>
 
-    <desc>Use <app>Clocks</app> as a stopwatch, a timer, to set an alarm
-    everyday or to see the time in different cities in the world, on the same
-    screen.</desc>
+    <desc>Use <app>Clocks</app> as a stopwatch, a timer, to set alarms and to
+    check the time in different cities around the world.</desc>
   </info>
 
-  <title><media type="image" its:translate="no" src="figures/gnome-clocks.png" height="22" />Clocks</title>
+  <title><media type="image" its:translate="no" src="figures/gnome-clocks.png" />Clocks</title>
 
-  <p><app>Clocks</app> provides different timekeeping functions in the same
-  application. You can also use it to display the time in several cities of the
-  world on the same screen.</p>
+  <p>Use <app>Clocks</app> as a stopwatch, a timer, to set alarms and to check
+  the time in different cities.</p>
 
   <section id="world-clock">
-    <title>World clock</title>
+    <title>World clocks</title>
 
-    <p>Use this feature to display the time in several global cities on the
-    same screen. You can also obtain additional information like the time of
-    sunrise and sunset from the world clock.</p>
+    <p>View the time in cities around the world on the same screen. You can
+    also check if it is still the same day in those cities, and the sunrise and
+    sunset times.</p>
 
   </section>
 
   <section id="alarm-clock">
-    <title>Alarm clock</title>
+    <title>Alarm clocks</title>
 
-    <p>Use this feature to set alarms. You can set some alarms to go off on
-    certain days every week. A snooze option is also available.</p>
+    <p>Set customisable alarms to go off on specific days every week.</p>
 
   </section>
 
   <section id="stopwatch">
     <title>Stopwatch</title>
 
-    <p>Use this feature to time your attempts at a certain task. You can
-    measure the time taken to finish each attempt, total time taken to complete
-    all attempts etc.</p>
+    <p>Use the stopwatch to time how long something takes.</p>
 
   </section>
 
   <section id="timer">
     <title>Timer</title>
 
-    <p>Use this feature to countdown a certain length of time, within which you
-    intend to accomplish a certain task.</p>
+    <p>Set a countdown in seconds, minutes or hours.</p>
 
   </section>
 </page>