[gnome-clocks/wip/mallard-help] Review the index
- From: Ekaterina Gerasimova <egerasimov src gnome org>
- To: commits-list gnome org
- Cc:
- Subject: [gnome-clocks/wip/mallard-help] Review the index
- Date: Sun, 15 Sep 2013 18:57:21 +0000 (UTC)
commit ca0b4a000a9e0ace8410f3565088ed5741985103
Author: Ekaterina Gerasimova <kittykat3756 gmail com>
Date: Sun Sep 15 19:56:44 2013 +0100
Review the index
Make the prose more active, try to give it a two-column style.
help/C/index.page | 38 ++++++++++++++++----------------------
1 files changed, 16 insertions(+), 22 deletions(-)
---
diff --git a/help/C/index.page b/help/C/index.page
index 448a311..fb97265 100644
--- a/help/C/index.page
+++ b/help/C/index.page
@@ -1,10 +1,10 @@
<page xmlns="http://projectmallard.org/1.0/"
xmlns:its="http://www.w3.org/2005/11/its"
- type="guide" style="task"
+ type="guide" style="2column task"
id="index">
<info>
- <revision pkgversion="3.9" date="2013-09-02" status="review"/>
+ <revision pkgversion="3.10" date="2013-09-15" status="candidate"/>
<include href="legal.xml" xmlns="http://www.w3.org/2001/XInclude"/>
@@ -14,48 +14,42 @@
<years>2013</years>
</credit>
- <desc>Use <app>Clocks</app> as a stopwatch, a timer, to set an alarm
- everyday or to see the time in different cities in the world, on the same
- screen.</desc>
- </info>
+ <desc>Use <app>Clocks</app> as a stopwatch, a timer, to set alarms and to
+ check the time in different cities around the world.</desc>
+</info>
- <title><media type="image" its:translate="no" src="figures/gnome-clocks.png" height="22" />Clocks</title>
+ <title><media type="image" its:translate="no" src="figures/gnome-clocks.png" />Clocks</title>
- <p><app>Clocks</app> provides different timekeeping functions in the same
- application. You can also use it to display the time in several cities of the
- world on the same screen.</p>
+ <p>Use <app>Clocks</app> as a stopwatch, a timer, to set alarms and to check
+ the time in different cities.</p>
<section id="world-clock">
- <title>World clock</title>
+ <title>World clocks</title>
- <p>Use this feature to display the time in several global cities on the
- same screen. You can also obtain additional information like the time of
- sunrise and sunset from the world clock.</p>
+ <p>View the time in cities around the world on the same screen. You can
+ also check if it is still the same day in those cities, and the sunrise and
+ sunset times.</p>
</section>
<section id="alarm-clock">
- <title>Alarm clock</title>
+ <title>Alarm clocks</title>
- <p>Use this feature to set alarms. You can set some alarms to go off on
- certain days every week. A snooze option is also available.</p>
+ <p>Set customisable alarms to go off on specific days every week.</p>
</section>
<section id="stopwatch">
<title>Stopwatch</title>
- <p>Use this feature to time your attempts at a certain task. You can
- measure the time taken to finish each attempt, total time taken to complete
- all attempts etc.</p>
+ <p>Use the stopwatch to time how long something takes.</p>
</section>
<section id="timer">
<title>Timer</title>
- <p>Use this feature to countdown a certain length of time, within which you
- intend to accomplish a certain task.</p>
+ <p>Set a countdown in seconds, minutes or hours.</p>
</section>
</page>
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