[gnome-devel-docs/dx-hackfest] Index: avoid weasel words and marketer-speak



commit 9966443d79b5b6bea6570ff9df7f0891939e9f62
Author: Federico Mena Quintero <federico gnome org>
Date:   Mon May 20 11:55:47 2013 -0500

    Index: avoid weasel words and marketer-speak
    
    Signed-off-by: Federico Mena Quintero <federico gnome org>

 platform-overview/C/index.page |   11 +++++------
 1 files changed, 5 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/platform-overview/C/index.page b/platform-overview/C/index.page
index 9a92252..0166d6a 100644
--- a/platform-overview/C/index.page
+++ b/platform-overview/C/index.page
@@ -27,15 +27,14 @@
 <title>Overview of the GNOME Platform</title>
 
 <p>GNOME is a powerful desktop environment with a strong focus
-aon usability, accessibility, and internationalization.  GNOME is designed to
+on usability, accessibility, and internationalization.  GNOME is designed to
 be usable by everybody, regardless of technical expertise, disabilitites, or
 native language.  GNOME makes it easy for people to use their computers.</p>
 
-<p>The GNOME platform provides a comprehensive development environment
-for graphical applications and other software:  it allows developers
-to create professional software that is easy to use and aesthetically
-pleasing. Using the technologies in GNOME, you can create high-quality
-software to meet and exceed your users' expectations.</p>
+<p>The GNOME platform is a comprehensive suite of tools and libraries
+that you can use to develop graphical applications and other software.
+These tools let you create software that is both easy to use and
+aesthetically pleasing.</p>
 
 <p>This document provides a high-level overview of the GNOME platform
 along with links to reference documentation on each part of the


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