[release-notes/gnome-3-8] refine

[Allan Day <allanday src gnome org>]

commit fa711fafd6cdbc656deb8b2dd1cceaea32a3c63d
Author: Allan Day <allanpday gmail com>
Date:   Thu Mar 7 17:41:53 2013 +0000

    refine

 help/C/index.page              |   21 ++++++++++++---------
 help/C/other-enhancements.page |    4 ++--
 2 files changed, 14 insertions(+), 11 deletions(-)
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diff --git a/help/C/index.page b/help/C/index.page
index 261ffd4..a906e7a 100644
--- a/help/C/index.page
+++ b/help/C/index.page
@@ -28,17 +28,19 @@
 
   <p>The GNOME community is proud to present GNOME &gnomeversion;. This new release features numerous new 
features as well as a host of smaller enhancements.</p>
 
-  <p>&gnomeversion; is the result of 6 months of work by the GNOME Project and contains &gitcommits; 
contributions by approximately &gitauthors; people. . We think that it is the best version of GNOME to 
date.</p>
+  <p>&gnomeversion; is the result of 6 months of work by the GNOME Project and contains &gitcommits; 
contributions by approximately &gitauthors; people. We think that it is the best version of GNOME to date.</p>
+
+  <p>Here are some of the improvements that can be found in the new release...</p>
 
   <section>
     <title>Application Launching</title>
-    <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; features a new application launching view. The frequent tab includes your most 
commonly used applications, which means that you don't have to spend time looking for the things you use most 
often. The all tab includes all your applications. Here we have added folders for organisation. This makes it 
easier to browse your applications by keeping some groups in one place.</p>
+    <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; features a new application launching view. The <gui>Frequent</gui> tab includes 
your most commonly used applications, which means that you don't have to spend time looking for the things 
you use most often. The <gui>All</gui> tab includes all your applications. Here we have added folders for 
organisation. This makes it easier to browse your applications by keeping some groups to one side.</p>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
   </section>
 
   <section>
     <title>Search</title>
-    <p>Searching from the Activities Overview has been revamped for GNOME &gnomeversion;. There is a new 
search results view and a new search settings panel. Together, these allow any application to present search 
results, making Activities Overview search into a powerful way to access the content provided by your 
applications. The new search settings complement this by giving control over which applications present 
search results as well as their order in the results list.</p>
+    <p>Searching from the <gui>Activities Overview</gui> has been revamped with a new search results view as 
well as new search settings. Together, these allow any application to present search results, making 
<gui>Activities Overview</gui> search into a powerful way to access the content provided by your 
applications. The new search settings provide control over which applications present search results as well 
as their order in the results list.</p>
     <!-- existing searc providers - apps, settings, contacts, documents, boxes, files -->
     <!-- new search providers - -->
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
@@ -46,13 +48,13 @@
 
   <section>
     <title>Privacy &amp; Sharing</title>
-    <p>As a part of GNOME's ongoing commitment to protecting our user's privacy, &gnomeversion; includes a 
range of new privacy and sharing settings. These allow you to control who has access to the content on your 
computer, how much personal information is displayed on the screen and whether features that track your 
activity should be enabled.</p>
+    <p>As a part of <link href="https://www.gnome.org/news/2012/12/help-make-gnome-safer-than-ever/";>GNOME's 
ongoing commitment to protecting our user's privacy</link>, &gnomeversion; includes a range of new privacy 
and sharing settings. These allow you to control who has access to the content on your computer, how much 
personal information is displayed on the screen and whether features that track your activity should be 
enabled.</p>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
   </section>
 
   <section>
     <title>Clocks</title>
-    <p>&gnomeversion; introduces a new core application for GNOME, called Clocks. This handy utility was 
first previewed last release, and has subsequently matured into a standard part of the GNOME 3 experience. It 
includes a number useful features, including clocks for different world times, alarms, a stopwatch and a 
timer.</p>
+    <p>&gnomeversion; introduces a new core application for GNOME, called <app>Clocks</app>. This handy 
utility was first previewed last release, and has subsequently matured into a member of the default GNOME 
application set. It includes a number useful features, including clocks for different world times, alarms, a 
stopwatch and a timer.</p>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
   </section>
 
@@ -64,24 +66,25 @@
 
   <section>
     <title>Classic Mode</title>
-    <p>Classic mode is a new feature for those people who prefer a more traditional desktop experience. 
Built entirely from GNOME 3 technologies, it adds a number of features such as an applications and a places 
menu and a window list along the bottom of the screen. Each of these features can be used individually or in 
combination with other GNOME extensions.</p>
+    <p>Classic mode is a new feature for those people who prefer a more traditional desktop experience. 
Built entirely from GNOME 3 technologies, it adds a number of features such as menus for applications and 
places and a window list along the bottom of the screen. Each of these features can be used individually or 
in combination with other GNOME extensions.</p>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
   </section>
 
   <section>
     <title>Details</title>
-    <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; includes a huge number of smaller bug fixes and enhancements. Many details have 
been addressed to give a more polished experience, including the login screen, selecting windows, inline 
chat, system status menus, and general usability fixes.</p>
+    <p>GNOME &gnomeversion; includes a huge number of smaller bug fixes and enhancements. Many details have 
been addressed to give a more polished experience, including new animated transitions, improved visuals and 
general usability fixes. Many of these improvements were made as a part of the Every Detail Matters 
initiative, which fixed nearly 60 bugs during the latest development cycle.</p>
     <media type="image" src="figures/details.png"/>
   </section>  
 
   <section>
     <title>Input Methods</title>
-    <p>Integrated Input Methods were introduced for the first time in the previous release, GNOME 3.6. The 
feature has been the subject of a great deal of work since then, with new features and bug fixes. These 
include a new on screen display for input method switching, new candidate character popups, new settings and 
the inclusion of all input method engines in the input method menu.</p>
+    <p>Integrated input methods were introduced for the first time in the previous release, GNOME 3.6. The 
feature has been the subject of a great deal of work since then, with new features and bug fixes. These 
include a new on screen display for input method switching, new candidate character popups, new <app>Region 
&amp; Language</app> settings, and the inclusion of all input method engines in the input method menu.</p>
     <media type="image" src="figures/placeholder.png"/>
   </section>
 
   <section id="more">
-    <title>And that's not all...</title>
+    <title>And that's not all</title>
+    <p>There's much more to GNOME &gnomeversion;. Read on to find out more...</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="getting-gnome">
diff --git a/help/C/other-enhancements.page b/help/C/other-enhancements.page
index ee9b280..84ebddf 100644
--- a/help/C/other-enhancements.page
+++ b/help/C/other-enhancements.page
@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@
     </license>
   </info>
 
-  <title>Many other enhancements</title>
+  <title>Many more enhancements</title>
 
   <section id="gnome-3">
     <title><media type="image" src="figures/start-here.png"/> Core UX</title>
@@ -91,7 +91,7 @@
   <section id="a11y">
     <title><media type="image" src="figures/accessibility.png"/> Universal Access</title>
     <p>High contrast application icons.</p>
-    <p>Easy switching between profile-based languages in Orca.<p>
+    <p>Easy switching between profile-based languages in Orca.</p>
   </section>
 
   <section id="preview-apps">