[mango] Some form letters improvements, thanks Allan Day.

[Andrea Veri <av src gnome org>]

commit f6281de67f734a9340088799e939470c7e08c678
Author: Andrea Veri <av src gnome org>
Date:   Mon Mar 12 16:32:22 2012 +0100

    Some form letters improvements, thanks Allan Day.

 www/approval-template.txt |   54 +++++++++++++++++++++++++-------------------
 www/renewal-template.txt  |   37 ++++++++++++++++--------------
 2 files changed, 51 insertions(+), 40 deletions(-)
---
diff --git a/www/approval-template.txt b/www/approval-template.txt
index 698bbad..68a5f8a 100644
--- a/www/approval-template.txt
+++ b/www/approval-template.txt
@@ -1,34 +1,42 @@
 Dear <member>,
 
-We are pleased to inform you that you are now part of the GNOME
-Foundation Membership. You are now eligible to become a candidate
-for election and to vote in the annual Board of Directors elections
-held each June before Guadec. You have been subscribed to the
-foundation-announce mailing list, where all the major GNOME Foundation
-announcements are sent. It is a low volume list and does not allow
-subscribers to post emails. If you would like to read the archives
-you can do so here:
+Congratulations, you are now a member of the GNOME Foundation! Welcome, and 
+thank you for supporting GNOME. Your name has joined those of the rest 
+Foundation Membership:
+
+   http://www.gnome.org/foundation/membership/
+
+As a member of the Foundation, you are able to vote in the elections of the 
+Board of Directors, and you can also put yourself forward as a candidate for 
+the Board. There are many other benefits to being a member, including having 
+your blog on Planet GNOME, a @gnome.org email address, and the ability to apply 
+for travel subsidies.
+
+To help you stay informed about GNOME Foundation events, we have subscribed you 
+to the foundation-announce mailing list, where all the major GNOME Foundation 
+announcements are sent. It is a low volume list and does not allow subscribers 
+to post emails. If you would like to read the archives you can do so here:
+
     http://mail.gnome.org/mailman/listinfo/foundation-announce
 
-You are also encouraged to subscribe to the foundation-list mailing
-list. It is open to the public (even non-members) and is used to discuss
-any issue relating to the GNOME Foundation. This is the place for you to
-suggest ideas and voice your opinions on issues pertaining to the GNOME
-Foundation. To subscribe or read the archives, go to:
+We also encourage you to subscribe to the foundation-list mailing
+list. It is used to discuss any issue relating to the GNOME Foundation. This is 
+the place for you to suggest ideas and voice your opinions on issues pertaining 
+to the GNOME Foundation. To subscribe or read the archives, go to:
+
     http://mail.gnome.org/mailman/listinfo/foundation-list
 
-It's not mandatory but usually a nice thing to do if you could send an
-introduction to the foundation-list mailing list to introduce yourself
-and your work to the other Foundation members and GNOME contributors. 
-They will be more than happy to know yet another GNOME lover.
+We also highly encourage you to introduce yourself to the members by
+writing to foundation-list. Please list your contributions and write a
+little about yourself, if you like :-)
 
-For more information about the GNOME Foundation, visit the GNOME
-Foundation's web page at:
-    http://www.gnome.org/foundation
+For more information about the GNOME Foundation, visit the GNOME Foundation's 
+web page at:
 
-Thanks for your contributions to GNOME.
+    http://foundation.gnome.org
 
-Sincerely,
+Thank you for all your great work as a member of the GNOME community.
 
-The GNOME Foundation Membership Committee
+Best wishes,
 
+The GNOME Foundation Membership Committee
diff --git a/www/renewal-template.txt b/www/renewal-template.txt
index 65d12a6..640a0ba 100644
--- a/www/renewal-template.txt
+++ b/www/renewal-template.txt
@@ -1,29 +1,32 @@
 Dear <member>,
 
 We are pleased to inform you that your GNOME Foundation Membership has
-been renewed for two years. You are eligible to become a candidate for
-election and to vote in the annual Board of Directors elections held
-each June before Guadec. If you were not already subscribed to the
-foundation-announce mailing list, you have been subscribed to this list,
-where all the major GNOME Foundation announcements are sent. It is a low
-volume list and does not allow subscribers to post emails. If you would
-like to read the archives you can do so here:
+been renewed for two years.
+
+Thank you for your ongoing contributions to GNOME, and for continuing to 
+support the GNOME Foundation.
+
+You are eligible to become a candidate for election and to vote in the annual 
+Board of Directors elections held each June before GUADEC. If you were not 
+already subscribed to the foundation-announce mailing list, you have been 
+subscribed to this list, where all the major GNOME Foundation announcements are 
+sent. It is a low volume list and does not allow subscribers to post emails. If 
+you would like to read the archives you can do so here:
     http://mail.gnome.org/mailman/listinfo/foundation-announce
 
-You are also encouraged to subscribe to the foundation-list mailing
-list. It is open to the public (even non-members) and is used to discuss
-any issue relating to the GNOME Foundation. This is the place for you to
-suggest ideas and voice your opinions on issues pertaining to the GNOME
-Foundation. To subscribe or read the archives, go to:
+You are also encouraged to subscribe to the foundation-list mailing list. It is 
+open to the public (even non-members) and is used to discuss any issue relating 
+to the GNOME Foundation. This is the place for you to suggest ideas and voice 
+your opinions on issues pertaining to the GNOME Foundation. To subscribe or 
+read the archives, go to:
     http://mail.gnome.org/mailman/listinfo/foundation-list
 
-For more information about the GNOME Foundation, visit the GNOME
-Foundation's web page at:
-    http://www.gnome.org/foundation
+For more information about the GNOME Foundation, visit the GNOME Foundation's 
+web page at:
+    http://foundation.gnome.org
 
 Thanks for your contributions to GNOME.
 
-Sincerely,
+Best wishes,
 
 The GNOME Foundation Membership Committee
-