[release-notes/gnome-2-28] Corrections to 2.28 release notes

[Shaun McCance <shaunm src gnome org>]

commit 627461ceb5ce23ee2413e89ac3b2fa00ed000b93
Author: Shaun McCance <shaunm gnome org>
Date:   Wed Sep 2 11:39:00 2009 -0500

    Corrections to 2.28 release notes

 help/C/release-notes.xml |    2 +-
 help/C/rnusers.xml       |   38 +++++++++++++++++++-------------------
 2 files changed, 20 insertions(+), 20 deletions(-)
---
diff --git a/help/C/release-notes.xml b/help/C/release-notes.xml
index b1038d7..97e8e03 100644
--- a/help/C/release-notes.xml
+++ b/help/C/release-notes.xml
@@ -54,7 +54,7 @@
 			<para>
 				GNOME &gnomeversion; is the latest version of the GNOME Desktop: a
 				popular, multi-platform desktop environment for your computer.
-				GNOME's focus is ease of use, stability, and first class
+				GNOME's focus is ease of use, stability, and first-class
 				internationalization and accessibility support. 
 				GNOME is Free and Open Source Software and provides all of the common
 				tools computer users expect of a modern computing environment, such as
diff --git a/help/C/rnusers.xml b/help/C/rnusers.xml
index d30eb1a..6953d03 100644
--- a/help/C/rnusers.xml
+++ b/help/C/rnusers.xml
@@ -27,10 +27,10 @@
 		</para>
 		
 		<para>
-		GNOME Bluetooth also includes support for internet access
+		GNOME Bluetooth also includes support for Internet access
 		through your mobile phone.  After pairing your mobile phone with GNOME Bluetooth,
 		 Network Manager will include an entry to use your mobile phone
-		 for internet access.
+		 for Internet access.
 		</para>
 		
 <!-- Fixme - need screenshot in Clearlooks similar to:  	http://blogs.gnome.org/dcbw/2009/07/10/unwire-with-networkmanager/ -->
@@ -53,13 +53,13 @@
 	  and with GNOME &gnomeversion; includes a number of new improvements.
 	 </para>
 	 
-	 <para>An all new Overview screen is now included, which merges the category and period
+	 <para>An all-new Overview screen is now included, which merges the category and period
 	 graphs to present a cleaner overview to the user.  Colors are also used for the first time, 
-	 making it easy to view the proprotion of time used to complete tasks.
+	 making it easy to view the proportion of time used to complete tasks.
 	 </para>
 	 
-	 <para>Other feature updates include improved auto-complete support allowing the 
-	 ability to update the start time on the fly; improved support for late night workers and
+	 <para>Other feature updates include improved autocomplete support allowing the 
+	 ability to update the start time on the fly, improved support for late-night workers, and
 	 the ability to add earlier tasks that have been completed.  Lastly, the export functionality
 	 has a number of improvements, including the ability to filter activities by category and date
 	 prior to export, and new simple export types:  iCal to import into Evolution, 
@@ -82,15 +82,15 @@
 
 	 <para>
 	  GNOME's instant messaging and communication application, <application>Empathy</application>,
-	  based off the Telepathy communications framework, has gained a number of new and important features 
-	  for helping users communicate.</para>
+    built on the Telepathy communications framework, has gained a number of new and important features 
+	  to help users communicate.</para>
 
 	 <para>
-	  The Contact List has been improved in a number of ways.  You can set your status 
-	  directly by entering it as text, or set it from a previously set status.  Re-organizing
+	  The contact list has been improved in a number of ways.  You can set your status 
+	  directly by entering it as text, or set it from a previously set status.  Reorganizing
 	  your contacts has been made easier as dragging and dropping a contact will move it, instead
 	  of copying it.  A View menu is now included, giving you quick access to sorting contacts,
-	  viewing offline contacts and changing your contact lists size preferences.  
+	  viewing offline contacts, and changing your contact list size preferences.
 	  </para>
 	  
 	  	 		<figure id="fig.rnusers.empathy">
@@ -101,15 +101,15 @@
 		</figure>
 	 
 	 <para>
-	  The Conversaton dialog now supports a number of new themes, including Adium message styles.
+	  The conversaton dialog now supports a number of new themes, including Adium message styles.
 	  Other improvements include users in the user list now have a tooltip; 
 	  the user list in chat rooms can be hidden; the Contact menu has been removed
 	  from the Conversation menu; and if your name is mentioned 
 	  in a chat room or conversation, that tab's text will become red.
 	 </para>
 	 
-	 <para>Audio and Video Chats can now be made fullscreen, and if a contact does not have video, their
-	 avatar will be displayed.  A redial feature has also been added making it easier to re-connect.
+	 <para>Audio and video chats can now be made fullscreen, and if a contact does not have video, their
+	 avatar will be displayed.  A redial feature has also been added, making it easier to reconnect.
 	 </para>
 	 
 	 <para>Users are now able to share their desktop with Empathy contacts using the GNOME Remote Desktop
@@ -119,12 +119,12 @@
 	 </para>
 	 
 	 <para>Geolocation support using Geoclue has been added for XMPP contacts, such as Jabber and Google Talk. 
-	 You can view your contact's location by hovering your mouse over their contact name, in the information
+	 You can view a contact's location by hovering your mouse over their contact name, in the information
 	 dialog or on the Map View.  Empathy also supports a reduced accuracy mode for users who wish additional 
 	 privacy.
 	 </para>
 	 
-	 <para>Empathy also includes all new documentation focused on helping
+	 <para>Empathy also includes all-new documentation focused on helping
 	 users to learn how to perform specifics tasks within Empathy.
 	 </para>
 	 
@@ -135,7 +135,7 @@
 		<title>Epiphany Web Browser</title>
 
 		<para>
-		 The GNOME Web Browser, <application>Epiphany</application>, has switched from to Webkit from Gecko for 
+		 The GNOME Web Browser, <application>Epiphany</application>, has switched to Webkit from Gecko for 
 		 its rendering engine.  While this change should be invisible to users with the exception of a few
 		 performance enhancements, long term the switch to Webkit will have significant benefits to Epiphany users.
 		</para>
@@ -163,7 +163,7 @@
 	  <application>Cheese</application>, a webcam photo and video application, features numerous improvements.
 	  Cheese has an updated user interface, and has added a "Burst" mode for taking multiple pictures at a time.
 	  You can choose the number of pictures Cheese should take and the time delay between pictures.  Cheese
-	  also supports the ability to manually take a picture via a webcam's "Capture" button.
+	  also supports the ability to manually take a picture using a webcam's "Capture" button.
 	 </para>
 	 
 	 <!-- fixme - add screenshot of cheese in burst mode -->
@@ -190,7 +190,7 @@
 			<application>Evince</application> now also recovers documents that were being viewed after a crash.
 		</para>
 
-		<para>Evince has also been ported and is available for <trademark class="registered">Microsoft Windows</trademark> platforms.
+		<para>Evince has also been ported to and is available for <trademark class="registered">Microsoft Windows</trademark> platforms.
 		</para>
 
 <!-- Fixme: Needs registered trademark symbol after Windows -->