Re: [guadec-list] cool story 1

[Sriram Ramkrishna <sri aracnet com>]

Thanks for the feedback.  The idea was to send a first draft and use it
to guide myself to something better.  I agree with all of the criticisms
and I will focus more on Asia/South America and then continue.

I think I got distracted wanting to market GNOME which is what caused it
to wander.  

Quim, excellent feedback and helps me focus more on the content on what it
should say.

sri

On Tue, Jun 06, 2006 at 12:07:23PM +0200, Quim Gil wrote:
> El dt 06 de 06 del 2006 a les 10:42 +0200, en/na Dave Neary va escriure:
> 
> > Some connective tissue tying the threads together would be brilliant.
> 
> A first paragraph with all the elements needed by a journalist to make a
> headlines or brief story too. What is the news exactly here? If your
> title is about Asia you need to explain Asia in the first paragraph.
> 
> A first paragraph without names, numbers or quotes is difficult to
> process by a busy journalist, or by journalist without deep knowledge of
> the specific matter. 95% of the journalists reading this piece will fall
> in one of these categories, if not in both.
> -- 
> Quim Gil /// http://desdeamericaconamor.org | http://guadec.org



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